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Hello. It has been a long time since I last posted, but I recent read the entire "How Not To Be Lunch" series and it really put me in a writing mood. I absolutely recommend it: https://aryion.com/g4/view/569713
Here is my first dinosaur story. it isn't perfect but I think I did pretty good considering how long I've been out of the game.
Please leave a comment about what you thought and any constructive criticism you might have. I'd love to hear all of it.
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Posted by Mechdragon1k 10 months ago Report
I am picturing these people as high school students, so not to get the fbi knocking on my door.
But I do like the scene of mass Vore, it is kind of funny, but the crunch seems abrupt to cut things off, seems like people can still be alive their and one can show how the pred handles the aftermath.
Posted by harpylove 10 months ago Report
They are indeed in high school. I should have made that more clear.
As for the ending, I do have a part 2 planned so I hope you’ll give me your thoughts on it once I finish and post it.
Posted by Mechdragon1k 10 months ago Report
My personal suggestion, some prey makes the full tour where some other prey gets graphic digested. Prey pov would be very cool too.
Posted by harpylove 10 months ago Report
Not quite what I had in mind, but I’ll mull it over and see what I think. Thanks for the suggestion.
Posted by Mechdragon1k 10 months ago Report
Now I am curious if this were more surivivors than you were planning or less survivors than you are planning.
How sexual do you view Vore as?
Posted by harpylove 10 months ago Report
I don’t really write vore in a sexual way. More of just an enjoying a really good meal, way. Though that is just my stories. There is plenty of other peoples’ stories that are plenty sexual.
As for if/how many survivors there are. I’ll leave that up to your imagination until I finish part 2. I promise it won’t be too, too long.