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Tokiwadai's Queen Shokuhou Misaki always had a bit of a gluttonous streak, having her fingers in a few too many pies. But that gluttony was never literal...at least, until she decided that her clique needed a little restructuring to serve her better...
Another short and sweet story at 1k (...okay, 1.1k...plus) words! Had this idea strike me this morning out of seemingly nowhere, and while I have plans to give one of my favorite girls in fiction her own big story in the future, I figured why not write this short thing I thought up while the iron's hot? Especially since if I didn't, it would probably sit and eventually die knowing me. And what do you know, I actually managed to do it! Quite the rarity from me, I know. We shall see how well it translates, because hoo boy, this was a rough day for the inspiration to strike, ha ha, ha...
Hopefully you all enjoy it, and until next time!
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Posted by Nobodyandnoone 9 months ago Report
To be honest, I've never really been a fan of massive weight gain with my vore, but its to be expected for some things as well human meat ain't healthy after all. Granted im also more into size-play anyways, but more Toaru vore is good as long as the end of the prey's journey (for fatal digestion normally) isn't made explicit. Then things tend to get... unsanitary..
Still, I wish there was more vore content for Index specifically, that girl is the single most vore potential character in the franchise, yet no one does anything with that. Hammerspace (or trashcompactor) gut, (she can pack in several times her own bodyweight without so much as a bit of pudge) Jaws that open about as wide as a human skull and a habit for biting? not to mention how recently she even made a joking suggestion about eating another person.
And if your into micromacro... well a certain former god turned fairy exists.
Still, as for suggestions for how you might improve these things in the future, I'd have put the exposition regarding the 'restructuring' at the start as a stage setter for the rest of the short story. Then I'd spend more time showing Misaki lure Junko in before going in detail with the actual vore, from the moment Junko gets eaten, to her slowly being digested.
Either way good work
Posted by Uniblades 9 months ago Report
Hey thanks! I really like your suggestions for improving the story, though this one was a challenge I put on myself to keep it at 1k words, since brevity is a really hard thing for me lol. So a bit more of a burn before the actual eating like that would be...near impossible to implement with that limitation, at least as I think it through in my head. But it might be a good idea to try for another thing in the future! It would certainly force me to really streamline dialogue, at the least.
I do want to do something both Index and Othinus haha, since I actually like Index, which is a bit of a rarity from what I've seen. Although unfortunately, I like writing those end journeys especially for same size stuff, so if I get to them soon, then that may be happening... I do agree with you on Index though, the girl is just too perfect for vore! Definitely something I just need to find the right scenario that tickles my fancy, but once that happens it'll be smooth writing for her!
Thanks for reading!
Posted by Nobodyandnoone 9 months ago Report
No problems, honestly the reason for my suggestion is because... well I've written a (lot) of these and I noticed having set up really enhances even dumb horny vore stories like this. Granted I don't tend to put a limit on length cause it stifles creativity for me, I just make sure I know the general idea for my scenario and how it'll end before letting it flow from there.
And yeah, Othi of course is perfect for accidental vore stuff or getting vored by others. And Index is... Index, like if you want one that does both... Index and Othi are so easy to pair.