Awwww... This story gives me a warm, fuzzy feeling in my heart. It's so cute, yet so well-written. The language gets a bit course at time, but I don't think any serious swearing was used out of context, and while the plot itself might put a few people off, who can suppress a smile when confronted with "Love at first sight"? Spot-on, good job, Baz.
nice story kind of a cliche ending though as its just a and they lived happily ever after but a nice story all the same
maybe next time you could make him get stuck inside her
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Posted by Anonymous 20 years ago Report
Awwww... This story gives me a warm, fuzzy feeling in my heart. It's so cute, yet so well-written. The language gets a bit course at time, but I don't think any serious swearing was used out of context, and while the plot itself might put a few people off, who can suppress a smile when confronted with "Love at first sight"? Spot-on, good job, Baz.
Posted by Anonymous 20 years ago Report
Thank you :-)
Posted by Anonymous 20 years ago Report
nice story kind of a cliche ending though as its just a and they lived happily ever after but a nice story all the same maybe next time you could make him get stuck inside her