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The top of your class in the nationally-renown Akedemiya, one day you take a visit to the artistic district of the city. Befriending a young lady with a passion for dancing and sweets alike, you could have never anticipated the inexplicable series of events that would unfold the following day.
Word Count: 11,450
Hey, nice to meet you all. This is my first attempt taking a shot at writing.
Normally I just lurk and amass archives of stories, but towards the beginning of the year I decided to expand my hobbies. This 11.5k monster has been baking for around 2 months. Normally I'm a fan of short and sweet <5k stories, but the scope of the scenario and draft ended up being far more than I bargained for (14k).
Still went through with it, mostly because it's a scenario I've pondered for years, with a character that has somehow gotten literally zero size vore content for years.
I'll probably drop stuff every few months, no guarantees. Especially after something of this scale, going back to working on other stuff for a bit.
Expect future stories also around characters from anime gacha games (familiar with a fuckton of them over the years).
Oh, and also to be nowhere near as long as this one.
All feedback is welcome, let me know any thoughts.
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Posted by ya55 1 month ago Report
Great story! It contains all I want, especially the description of the prey's unavoidable fate
Posted by RedBread 1 month ago Report
Thank you, glad you liked it!
Posted by Fatedmeal 1 month ago Report
The first 10 pages had me fall in love with the characters, that I already knew from the game, all over again. The next ten pages aroused a tension within my heart and mind. The remainder of the story was the quintessential gumdrop for this reading experience. It is extremely evident that you have a lot of love for this character and the series by the amount of detail you put not only into Nilou’s characterization but into the NPCs associated with Zubayr Theater. Nilou’s interactions with the main character of this story, the final gummy, and her fellow troupe members really immersed me in the setting and allowed me to form an emotional connection with the narrative. In short, you established an intimacy that I think is extremely important in fiction. Fetish and Non-fetish. As it was that intimacy that made me really feel the weight of gentle Nilou’s commanding grip and the weight of her sticky tongue. As the mere fractions of her body overwhelmed and carried the remainder of the main character’s story to a terminus. The sheer enormity of the relative giantess was excellently juxtaposed by the banality of her actions, when shown through Nilou’s perspective.
In short, I think you did a fantastic job in writing an unaware macro/micro story that makes me envious. I’m looking forward to seeing what you put out in the near or distant future.
Posted by RedBread 1 month ago Report
Thank you Fatedmeal, this is especially inspiring to hear coming from you! I've been a fan of your works for a few years now
Posted by stkpro11 4 weeks ago Report
I love the Nilou story. I'm kind of nervous to ask for my suggestion because I do love tiny people and a different specifics of vore QwQ
Posted by RedBread 4 weeks ago Report
Glad you enjoyed it, thank you!
Posted by stkpro11 4 weeks ago Report
Np
Posted by Nandelion 4 weeks ago Report
Definitely one heck of an opener for your first time in the portal. The introduction is rich and the initial bonding with Nilou made a lot of investment for me, makes me appreciate the futility of our pleas later when we think of her as our savior angel and then realize that our efforts are as worth as a grain of sand. There's a lot of accuracy to detail, and you include characters from her story quest! (Still can't forgive Inayah for hogging screentime though). I also love how you developed the pace slowly and confidently, the events are just right in length and super enjoyable. I love Nilou, and the way you described her goes leagues and beyond what I expected. Peak Nilou content. Keep cooking.
Posted by RedBread 4 weeks ago Report
Thank you Nandelion! I wanted to balance the story so it was more palatable for those unfamiliar with the game, which of course meant lots of setup and exposition, but like you and Fatedmeal said, I'm glad it paid off with at least some level of characterization, investment, or attachment coming through!