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So Lightning Dust has been causing a lot of trouble around the Wonderbolts academy, Spitfire has had to step in and take disciplinary action. She's probably not wonderbolt material anyway.
Hey guys been a while, I'm here with my very first animation in sfm!
I, know I've got a lot of stuff to improve, in particular I think my camera work and timing needs improvement, but overall I'm still pretty proud of what I've made here. I've been wanting to make my own animations for a very long time but something always held me back, be it a lack of self confidence, or not having a great pc. But I finally put my foot down and started to learn.
Special thanks to Blueblaze95: https://aryion.com/g4/user/BlueBlaze95 for the vpp models used in this animation
and the goat Jeschke (actually he's a squirrel but I digress): https://aryion.com/g4/user/Jeschke for most of the sound effects I used to make this.
I also have a second version of this animation with Spitfire and Lightning in their Wonderbolt gear. So if you want to see Spitfire wearing her skin-tight spandex, click this link: https://mega.nz/file/uOhFlCzA#IJuSlVqz_4pw2VwIofBKJnI6zaWWJ-boMKGdKtv4lAA
So, this next part is gonna get a bit heavy, and feel free to skip to the next section if you don't want to hear about my personal life stuff. Almost a month ago, my Mother passed away, it's been pretty hard adjusting to this, and this will probably continue to affect me and my productivity for a while, so while I hope this will be the start of something, it's hard to say how productive I will be in the near future. I also need to be working a lot more now that I don't have Mom to help, and I'm not getting any younger. I work a part time job right now, but it probably won't be enough long term, which will make finding time to animate, write, or draw even harder. I don't want to turn this into a pity party, but if you've made it this far, thanks for reading, and thanks for viewing my animation. It means a lot.
Finally, if you want to support my work, you can donate to my ko-fi: https://ko-fi.com/darkneonvs
however be aware I don't have any perks or benefits to offer right now. I plan on offering commission work in the future but not quite yet. And please don't feel like you have to donate, only donate if you actually want to support me and can afford too. I know times are hard for a lot of us right now.
Feedback and constructive comments are appreciated!
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Posted by Zapor 2 weeks ago Report
Yo there!
I afraid there will be a really LOT critic, so, i hope you will not be mad =)
1: Background. It not just dimple - it literally empty in bad way. Why not use any scene instead text box? It will help with immersion and umprove whole effect.
Same with light. Best light - it a bit darker when usual (disable world light or make it mush weaker - sorry, i not work with this software) and put two lights - more strong and warm (yellowish or red\purple) from front and weaker one, with more cold\blue\greenish color from back. It will make whole scene look much interesting and 3d-sh, instead of fully neitral light from nothere.
2. Movements. Good way for learn this - google 12 principles pof animaton, or move organic parts in more circular ways (easyes way for achieve this - move keys of x-movements a bit in side on key-line/ Same about Y-axis or Z-axis movements). And of corse, there ALWAYS exist a secondary motion - blinking, breath, step closer-futher, wiggle tail\ears etc. It is a key thing for make your animation look better - most animations with bad shading can be really hot just because movements, and, in another way, i seen a ton videos with ultra detailed and realistic shading, but they moved just... meh. Just look at Eskoz - most of his works have simple shading, but his movements!
3. Sounds. There just no soundscape - only some rare sounds like licking and gurgle, which in usual silence feel too lout and out of place. Just add much more sounds - breathe, maybe muffed presy`s screams, pred`s giggle, wind blowing or ourside sounds \music. Make sounds juicy - or better not do any!
Sorry if i been harsh or rude - i not planned be. Just wanted give a critic, but sadly there a bit too many things which need in improve XD
Posted by DarkNeonVS 2 weeks ago Report
Don't worry, I appreciate it.
I left the background simple because, well this was a learning experience for me, and I wanted to just focus on learning how sfm works and how to animate for now. I know that doesn't really excuse it, just it wasn't my focus.
I admit I may have rushed the sound a little bit in my excitement to put something out.
I'm already starting on my next one which I plan on being a lot bigger than this, so hopefully I'll improve a lot by the time that's done.
Thanks for the criticism.
(Also I'm a really big fan of your works!)
Posted by ActualAlisterWilde 2 weeks ago Report
I must say for a first animation you have done wonderfully! I'm sure with a few more made you will be well on your way to becoming a great animator!
Posted by DarkNeonVS 2 weeks ago Report
Thank you, that means a lot.
Posted by ActualAlisterWilde 2 weeks ago Report
I look forwards to seeing more from you! <3