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My first attempt at writing a um... kinky story. o.O
It's pretty disterbing if your not into things such as; vore, guro, rape, digestion, scat, death and some other freaky things. :3 If you are then I hope you like. Please leave a comment. ^^
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Posted by MStuarn 16 years ago Report
While I'm not much for the impalement before the anal vore (don't get me wrong, I think it's hot. I just prefer my prey to be still alive when being digested ;) ) I still think this story is rather hot. I mean come on, impalement -and- post vore scat? :P
Posted by WolfSushi 16 years ago Report
Thankz ;D
Posted by Speedyblupi 9 years ago Report
A full critique, mostly just because I can:
There are a few spelling/grammar errors and inconsistent tenses. Aside from that the way the story is written is fairly good.
In terms of content there are a few things which seemed strange and unnecessary (I don't mean the fetish stuff), like the dick measurements.
The last clause of the sentence "The force of the gushing streams of cum pushes his body so deep it floods its way into the dragon's stomach, filling the dragon's entire insides and dripping cum from his tail hole." doesn't make any sense, and contradicts "After his cock stops throbbing and goes soft he pulls out of his mate, with the wolf sliding off and left inside."