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Seeing their newly-accepted members having a little difficulty following the rules, the clan leaders decide to build a second clan site; an Outpost to stage explorations from, and a place the rowdier newcomers can stay.
While exploring a possible site, however, they make a momentous discovery... that will change everything...
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Sadly,there is NO VORE in this episode. In fact there's no real Action. It just brings the story further along... although Part 10 will more than compensate, I must say. >_
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Posted by Harmony2Discord 16 years ago Report
That is quite the discovery! I bet it was fun trying to figure out how to describe all that stuff.
Posted by KavenBach 16 years ago Report
"FUN?" Try "mind-boggling." ;)
I mean... I was trying to write those things out and realized just how much we take for granted! How can you describe things like lights and wine and generators when you've never seen anything remotely similar in your life?! I took liberties with the "Ancient Picture Books" hidden on the clan site (I'm assuming piles of National Geographics, basically), but still...
Now, would an engine work after 200 years? Would food and explosives still be good? I'm assuming the "Mindkiller Cataclysm" occurred in a near future, so I'm granting that humanity had made a few more discoveries that might help keep things good.
The further this story progresses, though, the less believeable it gets. :/
Posted by Harmony2Discord 16 years ago Report
if the engine was in an 85 delorean I bet it would work after 200 yrs. ^_^ And food wise, I'm sure twinkies can't go bad...or can they? haha
Posted by KavenBach 16 years ago Report
*groan*... *facepalm* -_-
Posted by Harmony2Discord 16 years ago Report
maybe not a twinkie guy...?
Posted by KavenBach 16 years ago Report
Maybe I just don't want that many chemicals in my characters' bodies... or in mine. ;-)
Then again, I could be persuaded to eat a Twinkie... maybe it just depends where you decide to stick it. >_<
Posted by htabdoolb 7 years ago Report
Lots of plot, but not a lot of girl gobbling. Seeing as how interesting you made this anyway, I don't mind.
Having a mental picture painted of a girl being splattered and coated by dinosaur spunk was pretty funny, and hot. I liked.
I also liked Nancy and Bridget casually feeding themselves to a Claptrap plant to distract it. A little description of what the insides of one was like would have been nice, but the way it's just sort of casually mentioned was good in its own way.