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I was away this week. I couldn't draw, but I had my laptop with me, so I wrote this story. Better, I re-wrote it, because I already wrote it some time ago, but it was awful. I used to write fan-fictions in Italian language (dealing with DragonBall at first, then Death Note), so I wanted to try to write something Vore related in English.
This story deals with Askel and Gardy's first meeting. Starting with the first time they saw each other up to the story version of my comic "What Vorarephilia is". The Vore part is just in the end, while the first part deals with the evolution of their relationship.
If you find something , tell me: those are notes in Italian that I wrote when I wasn't sure of what I wrote. Maybe I forgot to delete some of them.
This is my first attempt to write something Vore related. Hope you like it! ^^
UPDATE: removed a note I left by mistake. ^^"
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Posted by ItsJustaGoober 13 years ago Report
Hmmmm...i think there's a bit of spelling and grammar issues...but,other than that,this story made my day...it made me go "D'awwwww~"
I think the end was a nice touch,too..."She lied on the sofa, and gently started rubbing her belly... 'I love you...' she thought. Unfortunately, probably that thought never touched Askel's mind..."
Best ending...I hope more stories and art from you are to come whenever they rear their heads.:D
Posted by Askrow 13 years ago Report
Heh, sorry for those issues, it's the first time I write a story in English. Expecially I don't know a lot of idiomatic sentences, so sometime it's hard to me to write in English what I'm thinking in Italian. They're really different. For instance: the Italian "chi la fa l'aspetti", that literally translated is "who does it, expect it", is the same of the English "What goes around, comes around". :)
Posted by ItsJustaGoober 13 years ago Report
Hmmmmm...idioms are a fickle thing...but,the fact that you tried your very best to come close is good enough...seriously,with English not being your first language,I can only imagine how hard it must be...I've seen people take classes here in the states who didn't know it...it takes almost a year for some...>>;
Point besides,I'm sure you'll do fine from further here on out~:)
Posted by Askrow 13 years ago Report
Thank you. Well, I studied English for 7 years at school (and I'm still studying), but the Internet helped me a lot to learn it (in fact I got high grades in this subject). By the way, even visiting and writing on this Portal is helping me to learn English better and better. ^^
The funny side is that I've also studied French for 8 years, but I can't even put two words in line with that language... ^^"
Posted by ItsJustaGoober 13 years ago Report
...I don't mean to be crass,but I think French is a dying language...XD
And that's very impressive,my friend!:D