The Request
By 13master13 -- Report
*THIS IS AN OLD DRAFT*
Check out an updated and improved version in my free ebook, Jen's Vorigins:
https://aryion.com/g4/view/522212
Jen, again - the adventure continues!
Honestly, I'm not entirely happy with this... it took me a few days to write - I kept losing focus. Been distracted lately.
Let me know what you guys think - maybe I'll rewrite it, if it's subpar. If not, enjoy!
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Posted by Beheader205 14 years ago Report
It was actually pretty good. I enjoyed it :D
Posted by Gypa 14 years ago Report
Only re-write I see on horizon If I were you just remove all smoking refrences because not all pepoles like the idea of smoking other than that this was very fine story.
Posted by 13master13 14 years ago Report
I figured some people wouldn't dig it, but they can get over it.
Posted by Gypa 14 years ago Report
Yes, they can get over the smoking thing (if smoking is turn on for you), planning to write more in this series? I think its aswome. I might have sequel idea if you want hear it can send you pm.
Posted by 13master13 14 years ago Report
I might take a little break from writing this stuff in general (or just do it on weekends), but I definitely intend on keeping the series going.
If you have any ideas, go ahead and send them over, and I'll check 'em out.
Posted by shabbacabba 14 years ago Report
I wanna meet Jen! Maybe date her for a while, find her some prey, and watch while she eats em. n_n
Posted by thefatalenglishman 13 years ago Report
OK. I'm not a smoker (except the occasional pipe), but the references don't bother me. If I go a day without seeing a single smoker, I must be in hospital. The point is, don't worry about writing about it if you like it, and if people hate you for it, they're idiots. This is one of my all-time favourite stories. Don't stop writing.