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I decided to re-visit an old character. I kind of enjoyed this pragmatic psychiatric predator for whom swallowing someone was sometimes the most logical method to use for a patient's therapy.
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Posted by joeburp22181 13 years ago Report
Pretty cool story,
Loved the soft vore, though I like the pred a little darker. You did a good job submerging the reader into her life.
Thanks for the post
Posted by printz 13 years ago Report
Thank you very much. I'm learning more all the time so I appreciate any kind of feedback. I do kind of make my preds a bit too sweet. There is a little feeling in the back of my mind that they are expert manipulators and their intentions are to get their prey into their stomachs anyway they can. They prefer to do it with a smile and soothing words. The doctor doesn't need to be like that. I agree that she needed to be much tougher. She clearly hates the guy. I've been making my preds digest their prey painlessly. She shouldn't have been concerned about his comfort at all. I like your take on her much better than I do mine.
Posted by joeburp22181 13 years ago Report
Everyone has their own style of writing.
Take positive criticism for what its worth, but don't let it ultimately change or shape your style of writing. I guess for me when I am reading a story about a same size voress, I like to feel like I am out of control when reading, it is part of what enchants me to continue and what makes the story exciting. It is a delicate balance because you don't want to make the reader feel like the pred is violent, just dominent. It is a delicate balance when writing, to make the pred dominent, but at the same time to not make her so evil that it overwhelms the story. I am a bit of a writer, though I haven't wrote a story in a while. If you care to reach out for a few ideas, you are welcome to look at a few of my stories in my deviant art collection.
http://joeburp22181.deviantart.com/
Posted by joeburp22181 13 years ago Report
It never hurts to be descriptive in your story, since during the time of the voreing process, it is the most engrossing part of it. I generally get more out of a story when the details are more specific during such time because it is basically the pivital moment that the whole story was building up to to begin with. Some writers spend too little time during this process to be descriptive and it makes the story to me, feel like a rush job, while others at times, you will find (even in my stories) a lot of words used to the finallized event of the vore. Same may consider it a bit to descriptive, but to each their own I would say.