Posted by Bright 12 years ago Report

Child abductors are some of the worst people there is.

Posted by printz 12 years ago Report

I think I was into the subject because of some recent tragedies. I've always felt taht there was no fitting punishment that could ever make up for what people like that have done to children and their families. While I honestly did try to lead up to a silly punchline with a sort of shagy dog kind of plan in mind, I wanted Xochi to slowly discover taht it would be all to easy to find people she wouldn't feel bad about eating. I enjoy a lot of different vore scenarios but you might have noticed that I'm not a fan of using underage prey. Some things I've found to be quite far from my comfort level.

You're a very, very smart man and I enjoy both your comments and your work. My stories have taken a less sexy tone with the Xochi and Roxana stories. That's because I'm trying to capture a character much like the real people I have a habit of using. I find one thing interesting about using real friends. I have never gotten negative feedback on the subject matter. What I'm saying is that the whole vore thing doesn't embarass me to discuss. There are five sisters, several cousins and a few friends who moved here from Mexico (legally). They love the stories. I'm trying really hard to come up with something that I'm not sure works or not but I'll take whatever comments you might have. Don't be shy about telling me what sucks.

Posted by Bright 12 years ago Report

It feels like there should be some sort of line in there. Like, you have the first part of the story which is about Xochi following the child abductor, and then you have the second part which is more about Xochis relation with the family. There is an obvious shift in time and space, and having it made clearer would make the story easier to read.


I haven't really read much about Xochi and Roxana before, so I didn't really think much of the characters.


I also think you should use a different word than pred. Unless it means something else in this story, it is just slang and a short version of predator. Saying you need armor piercing round for a pred seems a bit wrong when for instance a wolf is also a predator.


The flow of the words in this story is okay, but the first paragraphs have a lot of "She looked, Xochi did" beginnings of the sentences and it kinda ruins the reading flow. The rest of the paragraphs seems fine.



Also, the ending pun is pretty horrible, heh.

Posted by printz 12 years ago Report

I've sent a private message saying thanks but it was too much to fit here I guess. I'm going to edit the story. I agree with everything you've said. Yes, I stole that pun but I thought it worked better in a vore context anyway. I overuse "pred" because I'm lazy. My girls simply stole it because, it their universe, they read vore stories and just didn't know what else to call themselves. Cat Girl, Naga or whatever would likely work better in place of the word pred.

Posted by Bright 12 years ago Report

Read your message.

What really surprised me was that the little girl knew what a pred was and that she had read about it.

Posted by printz 12 years ago Report

In my world the predators came out of the closet and managed, to the chagrin of many people I'd assume, to have their activities legally sanctioned. Kids often know stuff their parents never pay attention to. Still, it was a bit contrived. While I'm editing, I might explain that in more detail. The logic is that since laws only govern humans, the preds stand outside of the law. They just promise they'll be on their best behavior. They have their own code of conduct. They often go into places using their naga form if they're nagas. Roxana can't change back to her human form.

People who live in the vicinity of preds aren't surprised anymore. On the other hand, it might be pretty scary for someone when the person behind you in line can legally eat you and looks pretty hungry.

The cat girl is new to my imaginary world so she's not sure how people will react. Roxana wasn't originally made to have wings but it was a fluke of some sort. She's kind of difficult to ignore since she has big red wings and can fly. Roxana is a strict Catholic and she feels it was a sacred gift that she has to use in a just cause. These preds desperately want to do the right thing. On the other hand, humans are so much fun to swallow.

Posted by Bright 12 years ago Report

A flying naga that is a strict catholic. That sounds like a fun idea.

As for the legal terms, I don't laws work like that. If the "preds" are citizens of a country, they are also subject to its laws.

Posted by printz 12 years ago Report

Well you know I just kind of made it up to make it easy for them to get away with murder and not see it as such. The real problem is that the legal system is corrupt in my imaginary universe. They like it that they can manage their private prison system more easily by profiting from the preds. I don't do much with this and I've written so many stories that I've simply deleted where the preds feel they've more or less signed a pact with the devil. There is no death penalty in Michigan but prisoners are given the option of being prey or facing a miserable prison sentence. The way out for the prisoner is something he/she isn't aware of.

I went back to an early idea where people are "tagged" and their conscious minds transferred to a super sophisticated virtual reality.I haven't used this yet but they may be able to move about the real world in sophisticated robot bodies. I'm still trying to flesh tath out in some way. The preds don't have to conform to every law because they aren't the same species as we are. They do conform to traffic regulations, they don't steal things and they pay taxes. It's only on the issue of diet that they get a free ride. For the legal system, it's all about someone profiting from the preds. This is all tied in to my pred world's impending conflict.

Posted by Bright 12 years ago Report

Of course, if there is someone from inside the politics working around, that makes it a lot easier when it comes to favoring certain species.

Still, I am pretty sure eating people is rather frowned upon.

Posted by printz 12 years ago Report

It's not very often a socially appropriate activity. I rarely use this scenario but I often imagine it being a situation where a big drunk tough guy loses a bet in a bar. "Are you telling me that a little girl like you can swallow me whole? I'd love to see you try!" Outside of that, preds either get to eat criminals on the spot if they catch one or they take someone home and pamper that person for a while acting just as sweet as possible before eating him or her. You know it's all tongue in cheek anyway. I think they ate all of the judges who might have ruled eating humans illegal.

Posted by Bright 12 years ago Report

Out of sight, out of mind they say.

It really depends on what part of society gets eaten. Like:

"Rapist eaten in self-defense by catgirl"

has a better cling to it than

"Politician assaulted and devoured unprovoked."


Having some friends in the media could be useful.

Posted by printz 12 years ago Report

Everytime I try to reply, I get bounced out and have to start over. Am I the only one that happens to? Anyway, I have a list of politicians I'd like to see devoured. There are a few cable news pundit types and, lots of rapists. The politicians and rapists should be eaten by some nasty greasy guy with horrible breath and not a cute catgirl. Unfortunatly, a rapist wouldn't go after a nasty greasy guy with horrible breath. She might just give the rapist to a nasty greasy friend. Darn! She's too classy to have nasty greasy friends. She has to eat them all herself.

Posted by Bright 12 years ago Report

If it is any consolation, I am pretty sure the politicians wouldn't like being eaten by a catgirl either.

Posted by printz 12 years ago Report

But I'd still love to watch. I thought someone might do a catgirl secret service agent. She might get a little carried away: "I'll keep you safe in here! Now can hurt you now but, I forgot I have to digest you. It's still better than being shot isn't it?"

I really don't know how to do something on that order. She could be good at her job or be kind of a hungry idiot or pretend to not understand while she knows exactly what she's doing. I'm surprised it hasn't been done.

Posted by Bright 12 years ago Report

UNless she does it stealthily, she would have to do with the repercussions, no matter the reason she digested him.

Posted by printz 12 years ago Report

I was just throwing that out there because I thought it was the kind of thing you'd be able to work with that I wouldn't. I had the image of Romneys son trying to punch the President floating around in my mind. That would make for an interesting contest if one of the candidate's kids ended up eaten by someone employed by the opposition. Pleeeeeease don't take that too seriously.

Posted by Bright 12 years ago Report

Heh, reminds me that Jon Stewart said something about Mitt Romney unhinging his jaw at the debate and devouring Obama whole.

Posted by printz 12 years ago Report

This country desperately needs cat girls in the secret service. Lamias and whatever else would work nicely too. Both sides could have them of course. Who knows what the possibilities are? I'm sure Romney wanted to swallow the President. You know this election could be so much fun - if only...

Posted by Bright 12 years ago Report

Well, the thing about secret service is that you shouldn't really see who they are.

Catgirls and lamias are rather few in numbers so I wonder if they would be better in support or special assignments.

Posted by printz 12 years ago Report

I honestly didn't think about that! They'd be pretty easy to spot. Well. there must be something more subtle.