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Okay, so I decided to write a part two to this little experimental story I have going. =3
I'd like to write more with these characters in the future - it's always so much fun to play off traditional species rivals like cat and dog. And of course there's the added benefit that I mentioned in the earlier submission of being a complete preyslut and constructing a conversation between preds. ^///^"
Anyway, I tried to expand on their personalities and relationship a little more in this one; like I said, I'd like to explore these characters a little more. =)
Thank you for reading and I really hope you enjoy! ^-^
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Posted by Marked 12 years ago Report
Wow, I liked how you did the whole thing with dialogue! I do love the way you worked in a whole bunch of car and dog stereotypes while still making some amount of sense as a serious story. My only real complaint would be that I don't see how the cat would remain friends after this point. I mean, the dog was pretty much joking about what seemed to seen as murdering him. I haven't read the first part of this yet, but unless the cat is really more a prey at heart than he lets on, I just don't see it. Apart from that, there were a few points where I though you voice overwelmed that of the characters, such as the explainations of the differing predatory style of cats and dogs. That's not to bad though because it was a nice bit of comparison; it just didn't make good dialogue. Thank you for being couragous enough for an experiment like this.
Posted by Izzy_Koji 12 years ago Report
Well, thank you for the thoughtful and constructive comment! I'm glad to hear the you enjoyed my writing, and thank you very much for the watch as well! I'm very appreciative of people who take the time to leave their thoughts like that. =3
Posted by Bright 12 years ago Report
Ooh, nice follow up to the last chapter.
I enjoy the dialogue between these two.
Posted by Izzy_Koji 12 years ago Report
Thank you! ^^ I'm very glad to hear that you enjoyed it. These are such fun to write; I can't wait to start on the next one. =)