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This is first half of chapter 4 of my dragon story Birth to Fire.
I'm uploading this to show I'm not dead, and that I'm still working on the story. It's a bit little, but the second half will be uploaded soon as well, just hang in there, the story is about to get a bit more developed soon ;)
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Posted by Beaney 11 years ago Report
I'm glad to see you're not dead man; the story was just getting good!
As for feedback, it's genuinely nice to read a story that has some depth to it beyond " Here is the setting. Here is character A. Here is character B. Gulp. The End.".
The only thing I would say is that your grammar is sometimes a touch off, other than that, looking forward to more.
Posted by TheTeldar 11 years ago Report
Hey, thanks for the honest feedback! If you ever got enough time, I'd love to get some examples of where my grammar fails so I can think about that for future chapters :)
Posted by Beaney 11 years ago Report
No problem, and I would be happy to do so tomorrow. :)