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Jaime's first story, with all the stuff I forgot initially.
1. More dialogue
2. More character development
3. Better descriptions.
4. Longer sex scenes.
5. Longer, more detailed vore scenes.
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Posted by Greennyy 11 years ago Report
That is an incredibly well writen story. I would love to read "another story"... i hope there will be a sequel, it would be interesting to see how you do the split body command throughout the story.
Posted by TerminusOmega 11 years ago Report
I already have the sequel in the works. Before that though, there is the intermission stories.
Posted by Greennyy 11 years ago Report
I cannot wait for the next story, your writing style is incredible. You really bring your characters to life, you truly take everything into account(though ive always wondered while looking at most of the stuff here... while digesting how much would the stomach actu actually shrink? After all, eating a solid hunk of meat and bone, even digested, would still leave a bigger thn normal stomach size... wouldnt it? But you took that question out of consderation when their bodies part of them are used to modify the eater's body...) its just amazing, reading your words.