Incredibly hot, amazing for a first story. Would love to see a little more teasing from the pred, especially after her meals are helplessly in her belly, and maybe post-digestion they plump her up a little, too. Bravo!
I'm glad you liked it! I agree that I could have put more teasing in, but I decided to make the focus more on domination than overt cruelty though (although one could argue either way on the psuedo-rape). I also purposely left the end open-ended, so that the reader could decide themselves whether it was fatal or non-fatal, though I suppose it leans more towards fatal. Thanks for the suggestions!
Posted by nauczyciel 10 years ago Report
unbelievably erotic
hope to read more from you
Posted by joeburp22181 10 years ago Report
Wow what a bitch, nice story!
Posted by Argh 10 years ago Report
Incredibly hot, amazing for a first story. Would love to see a little more teasing from the pred, especially after her meals are helplessly in her belly, and maybe post-digestion they plump her up a little, too. Bravo!
Posted by sipslow 10 years ago Report
I'm glad you liked it! I agree that I could have put more teasing in, but I decided to make the focus more on domination than overt cruelty though (although one could argue either way on the psuedo-rape). I also purposely left the end open-ended, so that the reader could decide themselves whether it was fatal or non-fatal, though I suppose it leans more towards fatal. Thanks for the suggestions!
Posted by Argh 10 years ago Report
You're welcome. Can't wait to see what you write next!
Posted by Straxacore 10 years ago Report
Fantastic first story. I liked it a lot. Can't wait to see more ^_^
Posted by Bright 10 years ago Report
Well written story I say