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this one took longer than I expected.
and I am bad at writing fighting scenes, and I don't find them that fun to write.
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Posted by TheGleamEyes 10 years ago Report
Nice to see the story flowing once more, though its clear Red doesn't know that Naomi has hyper-regenerative abilities... like suriviving a sniper's headshot :P
Oh well... at the current rate, things should be getting interesting....
btw, i hope to start working on a 'alternate take' on this, if you don't mind... and i think you did well with the fight dialogue :D
Posted by Fairlyn 10 years ago Report
yeah, it was good to start writing again. Had a few personal things to take care of.
and yeah. Don't tell your potential enemy about your abilities. I believe that's why she's not telling Red about that.
that and. they (meaning Phantom) wanted an excuse to get onboard mother with the rest of us.. and having red arghue for taking them onboard.. kinda hard to beat that one..
also, I just wanna know. Naomi is the only one that woudl be fatal and just generally bad for one's health as a lover/snuggle partner?
and sure, have fun. just.. what's goign to happen, I wonder?
and thanks. I'm proud of the fighting banter, the fight, not so much. I feel it should have been drawn out more, somehow.
Posted by TheGleamEyes 10 years ago Report
At the immediate moment: Naomi would kill, Opal might kill, Calx would abush with a glomp tackle, and Sachi & En... not sure :P
As for the alternate take, it'll pretty much 'follow' from this point, but a bit darker (language may be present), and will have a bit of backstory. Just not sure when to expect it to be added... >_<
Posted by Fairlyn 10 years ago Report
hmm, thanks for the clarification. I expected it to be something like that.
I lie writing them, I find it interesting to play with other people's characters.
well.. I'm not sure I wanna read it, but go ahead and try to write it out. I am really bad at picking up other's people's pieces and start reading it. So that's pretty much why.
Posted by TheGleamEyes 10 years ago Report
No problem... judt don't know if/when i'll start working on/adding it.... i can get lazy with alot of stuff >_<
Posted by Fairlyn 10 years ago Report
just like me then. I am quite lazy too.
Posted by TheGleamEyes 10 years ago Report
Looks like we're lazy collaborators then :L
Posted by Fairlyn 10 years ago Report
oh yeah, I'm lazy as all *beep* at times..
also, merry christmas.
Posted by TheGleamEyes 10 years ago Report
Same to you, good sir :P