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Wow, I never thought I would write 4.5k words in one sitting x.X
I'd really appreciate if you guys comments your thoughts on my strange story!
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Posted by Amatsuma 7 years ago Report
Hi. This is probably my first comment and like on this site, and im proud to give both to you. This one was really sexy and had a better flow than Silva's guts. Krep up the good work!
Posted by FieryLion 7 years ago Report
It is my pleasure to receive your first favorite :)
Because I am just a newbie writer, your feedback is worth more than gold to me. So if you have any more ideas/input on my story, I would love to hear it!
Cheers.
Posted by GeneralUrist 7 years ago Report
"Does it mean that she can willingly force anything in her stomach into her intestine quickly?" Hmm, that's mighty useful indeed!
I'm surprised that there aren't more people commenting about how it is supposed to be impossible to shove stuff through your cervix, considering how they've been reacting thus far.
I wonder: Since her insides turn transparent when stretched, would it help to inflate with air before stunts like this? So her insides go more transparent without filling them up with heavy stuff?
And I agree with Amatsuma, this flows real well! It's impressive how quickly you manage to write this stuff. Keep it up!
Posted by Adseria 7 years ago Report
"She closed her eyes for a brief moment." So, she blinked?