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On a strange island, with no memory as to how she came to be there.

I welcome any and all constructive criticism. If there is any thing that you think that I didn't do very well or think that I could have done better in this installment please let me know, and I will try to do better in the next one.

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vladmakarov

Posted by vladmakarov 7 years ago Report

So happy that this is back, love this series and your descriptions, my constructive critisism is just pay a little more attention to some typos, in in the 3rd paragraph from the bottom, smack dab in the middle you say " I put the pot back on the fire to remelt the fire for a final rendering." When instead of fire it should be fat, certainly not a big issue by any means! Again, super excited this series is getting back going again, and perfect timing considering im currently on vacation right now, thanks for bringing this back!!

Sunkissedlover

Posted by Sunkissedlover 7 years ago Report

Oh my god I can't believe that I missed that when I was proofreading it. Thank you for pointing it out to me!

vladmakarov

Posted by vladmakarov 7 years ago Report

You're welcome! Cant wait for day 8 and the big meal it might entail for the protagonist