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Apex Predator - Ch. 1 By UnknownThread -- Report

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Tags: Gore Hunter Naga Non-Vore Predator

First chapter of a story I have been working on.
I'm a fairly new to writing so please point out any mistakes I may have made.

While writing I noticed I repetitively used the characters names instead of He/She I'm not sure if this is a real problem or if I should use He/She more.

Anyway please point out any mistakes I should fix and things I should work on for whatever I write next.

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Posted by UnknownThread 7 years ago Report

Sorry for the poor quality of this first chapter. I'm working on better understanding ways to write this and split paragraphs so it isn't a bunch of huge text boxes before I finish the next chapter.