if I may make a suggestion. Line breaks will definitelly help make this far more readable, currently in it's wall of text format it's a little hard to do so.
I think in the pdf format it won't allow it to be displayed, while I'm still interested and will download to see it, it might deter other people. Will write a review here once I am done reading.
currently it's a bit all over the place. There seems to be a lot of world building but no main focus. However I'm sure that that'll change over the next coming chapters.
Thanks for taking the time. It is a lot of world building, my intent is for this series to be the formal introduction to the world so when people read the other short stories they have a base knowledge. The second chapter has already gained momentum on more story telling. Still if you read the original document from ten years ago "or any for that matter" you'll see a huge contrast in quality lol.
Posted by Aickavon12 7 years ago Report
if I may make a suggestion. Line breaks will definitelly help make this far more readable, currently in it's wall of text format it's a little hard to do so.
Posted by SavageOne 7 years ago Report
Thank you! Line breaks were lost when I uploaded, format issue of some kind. I'm working on a solution.
Posted by SavageOne 7 years ago Report
Had to upload in PDF, weird. Let me know what you think.
Posted by Aickavon12 7 years ago Report
I think in the pdf format it won't allow it to be displayed, while I'm still interested and will download to see it, it might deter other people. Will write a review here once I am done reading.
Posted by Aickavon12 7 years ago Report
currently it's a bit all over the place. There seems to be a lot of world building but no main focus. However I'm sure that that'll change over the next coming chapters.
Posted by SavageOne 7 years ago Report
Thanks for taking the time. It is a lot of world building, my intent is for this series to be the formal introduction to the world so when people read the other short stories they have a base knowledge. The second chapter has already gained momentum on more story telling. Still if you read the original document from ten years ago "or any for that matter" you'll see a huge contrast in quality lol.