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Two companions who recently started on a journey together deepen their bond through a seemingly impossible activity.

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This is my first attempt at writing something about this topic, so please feel free to leave any constructive criticism or ideas! I hope to write more in the future!

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C107galaxytachyon

Posted by C107galaxytachyon 5 years ago Report

Somehow, I feel it’d make far more sense thematically for this to be same-size vore rather then micro: which it was.

Do you think differently here?

Metas

Posted by Metas 5 years ago Report

Perhaps. I'm just trying things out, and I'm relatively new to the subject. Thanks for the input, I'll work with it next time!

dcvfgb1234

Posted by dcvfgb1234 5 years ago Report

Personally I felt it worked really well with macro/micro. I don't see how it'd need to be same size to fit thematically.

C107galaxytachyon

Posted by C107galaxytachyon 5 years ago Report

To me, I really doubt a smaller morsel would provide better levels of sustenance to Momo's gut than ones that'd stretch it to its fullest capacity.

That's what the term "fullest" stands for: right?

dcvfgb1234

Posted by dcvfgb1234 5 years ago Report

She's not digesting him, though. Plus who says it can stretch that wide.

In the end macro/micro vs same size comes down to preference and I really don't see why same size has to be done here thematically.
I might be wrong, but to me at least it comes off a bit like you saying that you enjoy same size and hence would have wanted it to be same size.

Metas

Posted by Metas 5 years ago Report

After some thinking, in the world I'm building, only very certain races or classes could potentially stretch their bodies to accommodate a same-size meal; even then, it's a relatively rare skill. The Void Mages don't have any spell or ability to stretch their bodies. TL;DR: Same size is possible in universe, but not between these two characters.

dcvfgb1234

Posted by dcvfgb1234 5 years ago Report

This is a really nice story. I really liked it. And I really liked the macro/micro aspect. I felt it worked really well.

Would be interesting to potentially see Momo's tum gurgle somebody else in a future story. Perhaps even have Akira be in there at the same time to show how the tum differentiates between its contents.

Metas

Posted by Metas 5 years ago Report

Thank you! I'm definitely going to explore the idea of Momo eating someone other than Akira in the next Crypt.