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This story is a sequel to “Yangs unfortunate horse encounter” which I made after being inspired by a comment left by MadKing
I'm not sure how I feel about this one as it's not as comedic as the last but I suppose I can't improve without critique.
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Posted by Arbus1 5 years ago Report
10/10
Posted by MadKing 5 years ago Report
It couild have been better if Blake tricked Ruby into going into the horse. Thinking she could save Yang and they would pull her out with a rope. But when when it would be time to pull Blake coild habe bytrayed Weiss and let the schnee get sucked in tryong to save Ruby.
I think i have a intressting idea you could use. Pm me for the details. So if you do use it will be a surprise.
Other tben that it was good.
Posted by Mechdragon1k 5 years ago Report
I am guessing that horse has some kind of vore semblance.
Posted by Heymanand 5 years ago Report
It's explained a bit in the story before this.
Posted by KingYemmaDesk 5 years ago Report
Personally, I felt the story could be better and more conedic like the first, if Blake also accidentally got herself stuck inside the horse, but good writing nonetheless, even if it isn't to my taste.