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This is my first original work. It's inspired by the Cockvore Academy interactive story. A bit more brutal than I originally intended, but I like the result
Any criticisms and comments are more than welcome!
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Posted by grz01 5 years ago Report
Seriously your first work? Very very good, love the deep descriptions - well done
Posted by Nadamon 5 years ago Report
It is my first attempt at writing erotica outside of RP- and I'm very glad you enjoyed it!
Posted by UnendingP4rad0x 5 years ago Report
To be honest, I am a bit disappointed in the main characters' choices, coming too close yet again to dumb horror movie protagonists. Really thought a tazer would deter a seasonned killer? You need lethal force, the likes of a chirurgical blade, as a backup plan.
On the other hand, the concept is really cool and it is nice to see a prey put more of a fight, even if it was futile.
Posted by blushadoe333 4 years ago Report
i need a revenge story