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Shizune escapes from Naruto's vigilance and ends in his and Hinata's evil plans as punishment.
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Posted by KuroNekoChan 4 years ago Report
I love some "long pig stew" if you know what i mean ;3
Posted by Cookwithmom 4 years ago Report
Yes, I understand you friend, but the story was very short, perhaps on another occasion it would bring a huge stew: 3
Posted by MSM44 4 years ago Report
good job
Posted by Cookwithmom 4 years ago Report
Thanks :3
Posted by Nerazhul 4 years ago Report
The story in itself was quite good, but the grammar wasn't that good and honestly if you have no idea of the setting, you shouldn't write it.
The story itself wasn't bad, but as I said, the setting and the charactres within are important and if you have no idea of that, better leave it to a setting you know well.
5/10 (-2 for grammar;-3 for charactre relationship and setting)
Posted by Cookwithmom 4 years ago Report
Well, I have already said this before and I love the self-criticism of the users, in fact if they have as good you say that it is missing, it is because you really did not read the whole story really, because as I explain well there I am not a fan of the series .
All beautiful your criticism, but if you read everything you would realize that I used the little information that I know about the Naruto saga, I do not know if I explain myself well.