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kudos to SovietWestern for giving me some useful tips.
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Posted by delet22650nsf9n629 4 years ago Report
Heya! I write vore myself, and I've been noticing your stories! While I like the ideas, I do find them lacking in the details side. There's not really substance for someone to help them picture the scene, and the dialogue is a tad simplistic. Aswell as the lack of " " for when someone speaking begins complicates things and makes it a bit messy to read. For example, when Rem "Pokes her face and head out while struggling inside" to write it more descriptively as "Rem fought against the binding flesh, the imprints of her body trying to have any effect against the tight stomach." I hope this isn't too rude!
Posted by noytch 4 years ago Report
no actually that the kind of feedback i was looking for. thank you