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Leo and Jackie spend their first full day learning to fit in with the Nagas. What sort of shenanigans will they get into when things get festive?
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Very sexual chapter. Much smut. Starts a little under halfway though.
LONG chapter. Longer than the first one.
Control+F "forest" if you want to skip to the "good stuff"/ don't care about my characters. ;)
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Posted by Ray1700 3 years ago Report
I have a feeling Leo got up to some shenanigans while Jackie was having fun with Ek-teen... Perhaps Jackie will save him from his drunken actions when she get up and out of Ek-teen.
Posted by XiaoRenzhe 3 years ago Report
Hey! Thanks for the comment! And who can say what Leo got up to? What ever trouble he found himself in has yet to be told. (And who says he was only drunk?) lol. Thanks for reading.
Posted by bartek21 3 years ago Report
WOW! I really like this chapter. I am very curious what will happen next.
I missed your writing a lot.
Hehe, I guess I'm addicted to this story. ;)
Posted by XiaoRenzhe 3 years ago Report
THANKS BARTEK! Sorry I didn’t respond to your review over on GW, I forgot, lol. But I very much appreciate you still following and commenting on this story after over a year now! It means a lot. :) I’ll continue this soon!
Posted by MathiasGrim 3 years ago Report
having happened upon this series and just kinda binge read it all i love it and hope you continue it <3
Posted by XiaoRenzhe 3 years ago Report
This made my day! It’s hard for me to believe sometimes I could have written something this long people would read, let alone binge. So that’s really darn flattering! Thanks for saying so! And I’m definitely gonna continue it. I took a long break but chapter 13 was only written a little over a week ago. You shouldn’t have to wait long!
Posted by MathiasGrim 3 years ago Report
i have all the patience in the world for good writing like this so take as long as you want/need, no rush <3
Posted by ClosetedTiny 3 years ago Report
I have now finished binging this entire series. I am so glad I was able to read it and really look forward to the next instalment whenever it appears!
Thank you for writing this and sharing it with us!
Posted by XiaoRenzhe 3 years ago Report
Thank you for reading it all and leaving such awesome feedback! What did you think of the action in this chapter? I really wanted to make a Naga the centerpiece of some action instead of just being sort of the “setting” and background for some smut like I feel I made Nok-toon previously.
Your feedback was all wonderful and I am eager to get back to writing this! I leave it alone for far too long.
Posted by ClosetedTiny 3 years ago Report
I thought the Hunt (which I assume is the action you referred to) was perfect! It was logical in a world-building sense and showed us the Naga culture even more!
Will admit am jealous of the hare... getting snatched by two young nagas and being completely safe would be a dream come true. Maybe I need to think of a plot for something like that now...
Posted by XiaoRenzhe 3 years ago Report
Erm. No. By ‘action,’ I meant between ek-teen and Jackie. Lol. Though I, too, am jealous of the experience of the hare! Please feel free to adopt or adapt anything at all that this tale inspires for you!
Posted by ClosetedTiny 3 years ago Report
Ah, the Insertion and Unbirthing. Sorry, kind of a "Fantasy/Action" nerd, D&D guy.
Great detail for the tightness, that wouldn't have been something I would have thought of! I liked the hesitation and interaction between Ek-Teen and Jackie with the Vore scene and how it changed drastically when Ek-Teen suggested this new way.
As for the action and description, it was very good! You again leaned away from Pornographic and more towards Intimacy and the feelings of the two during this experience. Kind of wish there was more sexual descriptions because in my mind Unbirth should be a more sexual and pornographic experience (I say this even though the only time I did unbirth so far was in Yoga and Seek and both of those were very short moments). However, I still enjoyed what you wrote!
Posted by XiaoRenzhe 3 years ago Report
I suppose I could, at some point, allow a single character in this story to simply be raunchy. Lol. I’ll bear that honest criticism in mind.
Posted by ClosetedTiny 3 years ago Report
No no! Keep yourself unique, that's just a personal opinion!
Posted by EonsofIf 3 years ago Report
For some reason I hadn't read this chapter yet but damn I am glad I did! Great job! The perstalsis of the unbirth was a nice touch, keep it up!
Posted by XiaoRenzhe 3 years ago Report
Thanks a lot! And I mean… it was published After a loooong gap so it’s understandable. I’m glad you liked it!
And yeah, I wanted Ek-teen being a Naga to be at least somewhat relevant and have a practical difference in sex play.