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One of my writings that I wrote a long time ago.
Because I use a lot of metaphors and emphasizes, I did not try translating them in English, but I finally tried.
age regression, unwilling prey
Edit: I wish to rewrite this to complete in a better grammar someday.
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Posted by 8th Demon 3 years ago Report
I see this a lot with people who are learning to write in English, but you need to work on keeping your present/past/future tense consistent. Many languages conjugate verbs based on gender but English gets confused if you don't remember to conjugate based on time.
Posted by acrylic 3 years ago Report
Thank you for your guide :)
Posted by LemonBarb 3 years ago Report
In/out of bias, I missed a lot of your written/drawn content that's no longer there. But that said, here's my thoughts on this lovely piece.
Visually/at a stretch. The only caveat I'd have to say is mild formatting, more than grammar (in a sense of spacing could have made it look better on reading here). Wordplay's nice other than that. :)
Posted by acrylic 3 years ago Report
Thank you LemonBarb for your advice, and also thank you for uploading nice works.
I am a fan of your works.
I did spacings but they all disappeared when I saved the file in .doc and uploaded it :(
Posted by LemonBarb 3 years ago Report
I get that occasionally/all the time. Just something I'm always mindful when it comes to future uploads, story wise.
That said, glad you enjoy my stories in general, as well. :)