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A cute boy with a strong fetish for Succubus realise that his adoptive mom is one..., What a miracle X3
This is my first original story
Oh, and english is not my mother lenguage, so forgive me if i write a little weird
Anyway, please enjoy
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Posted by WoreHouse 9 months ago Report
As you said in the description, the writing style is unusual and makes it a little difficult to read... but this is fully compensated by the quality of the material! Although the script itself is quite simple, that doesn’t make it any worse. I can understand each of the characters in this story.
Why did the "mother" eat her "son"? Well... she's a succubus. She enjoys seducing humans, playing with them and feeding on their energy. Especially when they are so willing~
What about the main character himself? In a sense, he is the reader himself and embodies our own conflicting desires. So in this regard, there are no problems with motivation. I, being immersed in the plot, felt complete unity with his way of thinking and if I were in his place, I would make the same decisions and take the same actions.
In terms of the artistic part, everything is also top notch. Their communication, seduction, sexual actions - everything is cool! My favorite part is the soul vore, when our main character himself flies into the maw of a hungry demon. Delightful moment~!
I believe that such a good story has undeservedly few views and favs. Perhaps it's just a matter of a small number of tags? It seems to me that if not for this, it would have received much greater coverage.
Anyway, thanks for writing this wonderful story! I hope that you will read my comment and I hope that we will see more of your work in the future.
Posted by MasterFXLXL 8 months ago Report
Hey, sorry for the delay. Thank you so much for your comment. It was my first time posting a story on my own. I once gifted a story to dyltron9000, about her OC Kira. Its called "Dinner was served"
Its feel so good that my work is being prised XD
Posted by LSWaffle 2 months ago Report
Just beautiful!
I love the way Shota is presented as someone so innocent and inexperienced, despite his lust.
Furthermore, having the certainty of disappearing forever after death is one step further in the world of the "fatal."
my congratulations.
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Me atrapaste. Es vore.