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got the Taihou story done. took a different path when writing digestion this time. my next story might be slower coming out as I have been tired recently and I dont want to push myself.
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Pred: shinano
Prey: illustrious formidable victorious indomitable
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Pred: amagi
Prey: kaga
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Pred: cheshire
Prey: indomitable
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Pred: hipper
Prey: eugen
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Part 2 to the akagi story
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part 2 + rewrite of the kaga story
once again ill leave this to get opinions on.
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Posted by MVP 2 years ago Report
I wish kashino survived and the story progressed further, but this is a great piece
Posted by 369 2 years ago Report
Thanks. I decided to go that way as I wasn't sure where to take the story and didn't want to add a bunch of forced filler and ruin it.
Posted by Fusz 2 years ago Report
poor kashino, she just wanted to help and in her innocence she didn't see her predator, i didn't expect this cunning approach from taihou, i thought it would be more direct with an attack from behind or cornering kashino, complain about what she did for later eat kashino, and I really liked how it turned out, and in the end it would have been very funny that when taihou entered the commander's room, he saw the commander in his bed with another woman with a better body than her XD
Regarding the story, I must admit that I liked the digestion of the previous story much more, since in this story it seemed a bit bland, but it is still a good job
and lastly a rewrite of Kaga's story would be great
Posted by 369 2 years ago Report
yeah I figured taihou would want kashino alone to eat uninterrupted and with the hot spring skin she has it just fell into place. as for the digestion from the comments so far it seems like more detailed digestion is preferred so ill probably try sticking to that going forward. finaly the kaga story yeah even if I wanted to only do a part 2 I would probably rewrite half of it whilst rereading it.