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Marc is always plunged deeper into the devouring passion of Ashley. He tries to understand who she is and especially to understand himself. Lost in his love for this girl. Marc tries to survive.
Thank you for the comments that helped me develop this story.
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Posted by kailan 2 years ago Report
You made a good analysis. I hope you are not too disappointed. I give little information about Ashley which can leave the reader confused. The relationship deteriorated because of the events that happened. Ashley is taking steps towards her goal. She knows that Marc is already seduced. In this story Ashley wants him to also accept the vore in its real form and its consequences. She needs to weaken Marc which makes the couple at its lowest level. I will take your comment into consideration to develop the romance more in part 3. I may have to add a part 4 for the conclusion. Thank you for your comment that helps me to improve this story.
Posted by anonpls 2 years ago Report
I do agree with you. Ashley first needs to destroy all will and resolve Marc has and he needs to understand his destiny before Ashley can build him back up and mold him back to her desire. Ashley needs to be strong and needs to keep the presure up and gradually raise the presure until he breaks.
Posted by kailan 2 years ago Report
The answers will be tomorrow. I have made good progress. I am more than halfway through writing. Thank you for all your comments that help me to develop this story better.
Posted by Indighost 2 years ago Report
I like the scene with the wallet.
Posted by Kreate48 2 years ago Report
Nice work, an interesting setting and good descriptions. Have to say though that the pronoun use is confusing at times.