And this, my friends, is the last set up chapter.

I like the prompt that I made, I really do. But I feel like the pacing is all over the pace. It begins in mid res but doesn't do anything to properly set up the ramp up. The main character isn't characterized by his ability to commit violence but seems to spontaneously develop it. The rape is hot, but as a continuation of the physical violence it just does not have the sort of tension that it should. It's about 8k words long and I feel as though I made a mess of it.

But this? This properly takes us to the EVENT. Chapter 3 will conclude the revamping of the prompt and you guys will get to see what happens after.

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