XiaoRenzhe - 3 years ago

This was an excellent read. One of my favorites in a while. With the setup, most people would have ended this story a very particular way, and yet you deviated form that and I absolutely love the authenticity. Very nice story! And well written! Thanks for writing!

Diamonte - 3 years ago

RTF or HTML files are so much easier to deal with. Thanks for posting that way.
And, good story.

AnAccount - 3 years ago

10/10 blowjob scene

AnAccount - 3 years ago

The way the guilt and shame of nonconsent was handled was kinda hot imo actually but I get where youre coming from. I also kinda wish there was an extra ending where she just sort of accepts that hes food now but this was cool too

AnAccount - 3 years ago

I thought the same but understand it's just a plot device to justify the characters' actions. It's also implied its some sort of meteor or supermassive volcano or bomb as they mention a shockwave that will obliterate them

AnAccount - 3 years ago

WOW. I did not expect these paragraphs but they're awesome, and the ultimatum she presents him is hot. Yeah I agree that for emphasizing the point that his fate was sealed, skipping to there was good.

llaumepp - 3 years ago

Ahh the emojis aren't working for me in the comments either lol

llaumepp - 3 years ago

????????????

llaumepp - 3 years ago

Thanks this is really helpful!

Yeah, I see how this could use more context. In my mind, she makes the videos to lure in prey like Kal. I'm also think it may not have been clear enough that they'd agreed to safe endo before hew gets upset at her for the digestion. The part where she hugs him into her tummy is supposed to communicate that, but it's not 100% clear. Maybe paragraph like this, between when he's checking out her body and where they make eye contact might help:


He had gawked at her body many times before, touching himself as he watched the videos she posted online. Normally, her tummy would look different though, bulging with the outline of her partner, squirming around in ecstasy. He never really expected she’d respond to his messages, let alone invite him to participate in one of her videos. Not only were preds rare, and ones who look like Nix even rarer, but she only made videos featuring safe endo vore, exactly what Kal was into. He couldn’t say no. Now, seeing her in person, the effect she had on him was visceral; she was painfully arousing.




I'd never really considered continuing after where Kal's perspective ends -- I wanted everything to build towards that moment, where he realizes it's all over, and the fear he experiences. So I wanted to end it there because I thought that would help that moment be more impactful. You got me thinking about what would happen next though, so I gave it a try:


She dragged him towards her, and calmly worked at the frontside of his pants, finishing what Kal had started earlier in removing them. His clothes were soaked with Nix’s stomach juices, but that and Kal’s feeble struggles did little to slow her strong, methodical hands as she peeled the wet rags off of him and tossed them aside. She rose, and rummaged around in a drawer, leaving Kal alone. He was considering trying to run, but deep down, he knew he wouldn’t get far. Before he could continue his thoughts, Nix returned, rope in hand.

“Kal, I’m going to give you a choice. The first option, you can cooperate, we can get back to what we were doing earlier, and we both enjoy your last moments on your way out. The second option,” She continued, holding up the rope, “I’ll gag you and bind you up nice and tight, then swallow you down all the same. Only this time, I’m not going to squeeze you. I’ll swallow air now and then to make sure you stay conscious, so you experience every agonizing moment as my body melts you down into nothingness. I have to imagine it’d be long and painful, but I don’t know, no one’s ever chosen the second option before, because deep down inside, you all want this just as badly as I do. Isn’t that right?” She was leaning over him now. Kal didn’t want to die, but he wanted the second option even less, so he nodded meekly.

He was plunged into darkness as her mouth came down around him. Despite being horrified by where this was all going, Kal still found the idea of going inside of Nix arousing, and his member stiffened once again. The trip down was faster than before, forceful swallows squeezing around his body, her heartbeat thumping past his head as he was returned to his prison. Curling up inside, he reluctantly began to touch himself, hoping to distract himself from what was coming. Nix returned to her dildo on the floor, and resumed the slow sensual riding from earlier. Her muscles closed around Kal, pressing him into a tight little ball. He tried to keep pleasuring himself, but his arms were fully immobilized, and all he could manage was a pained twisting of his wrist. The air was still perfectly breathable, but Nix was squeezing his chest so tight, he couldn’t manage to inhale at all. It was already pitch black inside, but Kal found a different type of darkness washing over him. The last things he heard were his captor’s steady heartbeat, and her impassioned moans.




I also hadn't realized the formatting got messed up -_-. There's some random boxes between paragraphs that aren't supposed to be there, and the message she posts online is supposed to end with "????????????". I'll have to get that figured out before posting the next story :).

AnAccount - 3 years ago

It's seldom done*. Adverbs amirite

bronzelara - 3 years ago

Id let Vanessa mommy me and Im right on 5'6 if sge did want a daughter experience

Ruco - 3 years ago

I am always a huge fan of large Dom females preying on smaller males. And situations of a willing male being consumed and not realizing what is happening, is also nice. And o stop of that, I have a fondness when it starts with "innocent" facesitting. A woman that lures in her prey to eat her out. and ends ups eating her date instead. Love it.

llaumepp - 3 years ago

Thanks! Yeah always exciting to see new mini gts in the feed :)

AnAccount - 3 years ago

Not my thing but I read it all anyways because it was well written and pretty hot. mini gts is always a treat