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The origin of the New Star and a brief story of her life as a star. Framed by Dr. Vesly having conversations with Lady Morning. 10.3k words.
“Oh, yes,” she said as she poured a fresh cup of tea. “Stars hatch.”
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Posted by Mechdragon1k 10 months ago Report
Wonder if Vespucci while old or sick, would feed Lady morning.
Posted by Mourtzouphlos 9 months ago Report
Could that become a regular thing? Humans who are about to die deciding to give themselves to one of the starfolk in hopes of continuing in some sort of existence? I mean, it's better than dying right? Why not?
Posted by Mourtzouphlos 9 months ago Report
Well that was an interesting look at the worldbuilding. I kept trying to match what she was describing with the actual stellar life cycle. Is the fate of the unhatched eggs supposed to be brown dwarfs? Also, why did she use the term supernova? It's unlikely that the stars themselves would call it something like that, since the term originated from describing the phenomenon of extremely (super) bright new (nova) stars suddenly appearing and then going away, but he didn't understand it, so she can't be using the local word for it. Why not just say 'exploded'? It's relatively accurate and easily understood.
The Orange One's fate was interesting. It sounded earlier like the stars could keep those they ate in indefinite stasis, but that came off more like integrating their consciousness. Is it a matter of time, or size maybe? How much of him and his memories can she access? Are there some sort of master archivists somewhere who've passed on all their memories to a successor since the dawn of time?
And then there's the doctor, carelessly pushing onto sensitive subjects ... he's lucky she likes him; it wouldn't be unreasonable to get upset, especially after she showed a desire to change topics (he even noted the star she described didn't appear to be there anymore).
Posted by ObsidianSnake 9 months ago Report
These stars are very alien as beings/objects, even peculiar compared to our "mundane" stars. I didn't want to over-create terminology here. There's a balance to strike between the readers understanding things at the right time, the stars' magnificent semi-novel nature, and Vesly's mortal perspective. It's a fair critique to say I maybe under-baked in this department. Oh, well.
Regarding old Orange, there's novel processes at play here that we'd have to use a litany of terms and metaphors in order to sculpt something to the truth. And that sounds about as boring as he is. Anyway, the stars are Awesome, but they're action and experience-oriented. Even when refracted out into the tiniest spots, into something that can experience life on our scale in a meaningful way, even those individuals have complexity, which is why they're fun. ...Except him, he's still kinda boring.
Dr. Vesly is a very intelligent man, but he often misses social cues. He also tends to hyper-focus when the situation involves a subject that he's passionate about. But consider it another way: he learned all of this information because he is who is, annoying parts and all.
And the Hunter tolerates him, so that has to mean something.