Good work! Excellent Slaaneshi descriptions - mixing contrasting sensations and emotions, and all that; pleasant pain and painful pleasure (Those who understand, will understand). Special respect for the description of what will happen to their souls after digesting of their bodies. As a fan of Soul Vore, I liked it.
To the small cons of the story, I would attribute the too hasty narration - the prelude and the time in the demon's stomach, in my opinion, could have been savored more. Although, perhaps, I'm just too used to writing and reading stories of 5k+ words. Also, perhaps it was worth reducing the number of preys to one. Usually this technique is used to describe either two types of prey at once - voluntary and involuntary, or in cases where the first prey is a prelude to the main action that will happen with the second prey. Here, personally, my preyish mind could not fully immerse itself in the plot because of this circumstance.
But overall, the story is pleasant. Thank you for sharing your work with us!
Well and, taking this opportunity, I can’t help but say... Glory to the Prince~!
Posted by LobsterMaster 8 months ago Report
You know for such a fetish as this there's very few slanneshi vore content. I guess 40k isn't as popular here
Posted by WoreHouse 8 months ago Report
Good work! Excellent Slaaneshi descriptions - mixing contrasting sensations and emotions, and all that; pleasant pain and painful pleasure (Those who understand, will understand). Special respect for the description of what will happen to their souls after digesting of their bodies. As a fan of Soul Vore, I liked it.
To the small cons of the story, I would attribute the too hasty narration - the prelude and the time in the demon's stomach, in my opinion, could have been savored more. Although, perhaps, I'm just too used to writing and reading stories of 5k+ words. Also, perhaps it was worth reducing the number of preys to one. Usually this technique is used to describe either two types of prey at once - voluntary and involuntary, or in cases where the first prey is a prelude to the main action that will happen with the second prey. Here, personally, my preyish mind could not fully immerse itself in the plot because of this circumstance.
But overall, the story is pleasant. Thank you for sharing your work with us!
Well and, taking this opportunity, I can’t help but say... Glory to the Prince~!
Posted by WhyMustI 6 months ago Report
Thank you so much for your feedback! I will take this into consideration in the future and I'm glad you enjoyed!