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Lona is an average girl in an average world. Fit and in shape and good looking. Then something happens strange happens one night and her world seems to flips. Unable to satiate her newfound hunger, her ones skinny form starts to suffer the consequences. Not a fan, can she resist her newfound cravings?
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Posted by Subiefan 8 months ago Report
are you going to continue the story, its actually amazing
Posted by qazxswedcxswqaz31 8 months ago Report
Thanks you! I've had a part 2 planned out. I'll keep this in mind but still not sure when yet.
Posted by DoctorAkuroma 8 months ago Report
Oh god. This is amazing. Animal prey and the predator constantly belching has always been a thing for me.
Posted by qazxswedcxswqaz31 8 months ago Report
Glad to hear thanks for sharing
Posted by alittletrolling 8 months ago Report
I absolutley adore these kinds of concepts. Writing unwilling preds who lose control of their body in one way or another? Its a perfect concept.
The mental changes of the lady was pretty well done, and the swallowing sequence was nice and long! Great job!
I will say though there's a lot of grammatical and spelling errors. I would definitely go back and check. Also, you use "Said" way too often. It gets repetitive and prevents any flow from building.
But all in all, great stuff! Cant wait for part 2!
Posted by qazxswedcxswqaz31 8 months ago Report
Glad you like it and thanks for the feedback