Posted by VToons 5 months ago Report

It's been a while

Posted by grz01 5 months ago Report

Damn that is one incredibly hot story, there's something about willing prey along with a painful digestion that makes the stories very hot.

Posted by Goldendevil21 5 months ago Report

Do find the spacing between paragraphs to still be a little small. Makes the story feel just a bit blocky when reading.

Do like the setup with helping the readers immediately understanding the world. How this is about Ruby talking about her mother Summer Rose and how the mother is a grimm extermination expert. Even the introduction of the Grimm was great as you help ease the reader into what these grimm look like as futa.

Like the line during the sex scene, “soft grass of Patch.” Felt like that was a cool way to remind the audience that Ruby sees Patch as her home. Her soft home that she can always be safe at and now Summer is getting railed so hard her face is making out with the grass.

Good job capturing the feral side of the Grimm. How the Grimm eating Summer does not care about the little girl watching her mother get eaten by her ass. Does help show that the Grimm are still monstrous.

Also great job on the description in the next scene where Ruby is thinking back to that event. How she just lost her mother forever. She will never bake her cookies or tell her bed time stories yet is still aroused at the thought of being digested.

Also great worldbuilding for having a therapist specifically designed to help women resist the musk Grimm gave off to make women more horny and willing to be digested. Hose the therapist did succeed in teaching Ruby to treat it as a fantasy and not something she actually wanted.

Wow, the small details scattered throughout this chapter are amazing. Already mentioned the soft grass of path but now have another little detail when Weiss is being eaten by the bird. The line; ‘her nails cracked and her mascara ran wet.’ Such a cool way to show that Weiss is struggling against being eaten. Yet also how Weiss takes great pride in her looks with wearing mascara.

The story even does a great job showing how quickly Ruby relapsed where Ruby just stood there as a fellow huntress was eaten by grimm. How the show of Weiss being eaten had Ruby not thinking, ‘how do I take it out’ and instead ‘Weiss is a twig and barely a meal.’

I loved Weiss’ response to Ruby while trapped inside the belly, “I’m soaked you dunce!” Weiss is so proper that she does not even think that her teammate might be getting off to this. That Ruby is just being stupid and asking if she is soaking in the acids of a stomach.

Also loved the scene of Blake seeing Ruby for the prey-slut she is and also her lining up Yang to be eaten. Really showing just how dangerous the musk is that huntresses would betray each other to be eaten. Though do question how Blake is a feeder if she is giving all her meals to Grimm instead of herself.

Did like Blake grabbing Yang’s boobs though. They are a nice pair.

Posted by MoonColva90 5 months ago Report

Well, Blake is 'feeding' the Grimm with other people, rathwr than being a prey for them. Kinda like how zookeepers throw meat to the animals.

Posted by Horsemenofchaos20 5 months ago Report

I kinda want a sequel where team RWBY awaken to discover that they have been rebirthed as futa Grimm-Human Hybrids, where they still retain their former personalities, but they new bodies constantly emitting the musk corrupts them and drives them to lust and hunger. They then proceed to hunt other students and hunters, growing thicc and strong while taking every semblance they can from their new diet