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Pyrrha grows her cult. Jaune learns that having a semblance is often detrimental and Glynda is put on the spot.
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Posted by Daniel14541 3 months ago Report
So rwby are down and out of the setting it seems? Unless jaune can resurrect others as well?
Posted by Horsemenofchaos20 3 months ago Report
I'm hoping that they return as reborn grimm futa Hybrids, their personalities intactbut their new hungers making them wild and sadiatic like Pyrrha.
Posted by Daniel14541 3 months ago Report
Now there is a thought! Bet Blake would absolutely love her new existence since she can feel it from the other side now!
Posted by Goldendevil21 3 months ago Report
Have said this before and I will say it again. Add some spaces between the paragraphs so readers have an easier time keeping track of where they are reading the document. Also just helps with presentation as having the words all bunched together can give the feeling of being cluttered. Even if the grammar is good.
Not sure how to feel about Pyrrha being someone who wants humans to be meals to the Grimm so will not comment on it.
As for Jaune being reborn after every time he is eaten, oh this is a tough feature to judge in this chapter. On the positive side, just love how many times Jaune is eaten. How he has been eaten by Grimm and later by Glynda Goodwitch several times. Even Nora is getting on the fun of crushing his body and adding his mass to his predator. On the negative side, yeah, this really is the story feeling like it is treating one of its characters special while the others are all digested. Granted, this story did get rid of team RWBY which was surprising. Yet still does not shed the feeling of some characters being special in the story.
Do love the part Jaune’s body would be digested by his predator and added to their mass. My only problem is the story does not detail this enough. I want to read how Glynda must pull on her bra to make room for added mass. I want to read how Pyrrha eats Jaune and how her breasts get even bigger. As the story is, felt like the expansion of these women was quickly brushed over instead of being the meat of the story.
Also, Jaune has been eaten at least three times in this one chapter alone. You would think his reaction to being eaten would have changed after the second time when he discovered he can come back from the dead. Starting off as fear, then surprise, then just annoyance. Maybe even a bit of arousal.
This is personal preference but am not the biggest fan of futari. If you want to give Pyrrha a giant cock to ram her mate, then just turn Jaune into a girl. The story seems to act like he is a girl with how it talks about his juicy ass.