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Grime By PinkJazz -- Report

Don't worry guys I have more filth for you. Semi-based on a time I went clubbing in the real world. I'll let your imagination pick out which bits really happened and which bits are just me dreaming wistfully. There's more sweaty gross stuff in this one as well, so if that ain't your thing give it a skip :P

It occurred to me that so far in my stories I've had willing prey, but never enthusiastic prey. Time to fix that because goddamn if this shit was real would I be enthusiastic. It was a lot of fun finally writing from what I GUESS I could call my own kind of perspective like that.

Lemme know what you think!

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StormyGem

Posted by StormyGem 4 months ago Report

Sluts who are so willing to die are the best

p1313

Posted by p1313 4 months ago Report

Overly willing sluts, my beloved

JustNothing

Posted by JustNothing 4 months ago Report

You giving us treats like it's still halloween <3

Randomdude5

Posted by Randomdude5 4 months ago Report

First I want to point out something that is bugging me. The pred seems to be called both Sterling, and Spencer at different places in the story.

I want to point out what I like about the story. There are actually a lot of things I like about it, and I am sure that I will forget to mention some. I like how Claudia is a bit picky when it comes to choosing her pred rather than jumping down the throat of the first drunk guy that hits on her. I like how he is smitten with her cheerful, and bubbly nature, rather than just her body. I like that he is somewhat gentlemanly for your setting, even tho he still wants to fuck, eat, and digest her. I also liked the line where he said "Not as much as you're going to.." in response to her saying that he smells terrible. Another detail that I liked is that he licks her breasts while fucking her. He gets to taste her body before he eats her. While I sometimes enjoy painful digestion in stories, but it is also nice that Claudia enjoyed her time in the stomach. I also liked how the pred was enough of a romantic to think about Claudia after he digested her, and went back to dump her at the Underclub.

While the gross stuff isn't to my tastes(pun intended), it still works in your story. There is one complaint I have tho. When he dumps Claudia out behind the club, the brunette is there again. What bothers me is that she goes from grossed out, and repulsed to rimming him. This *feels* like too much of a personality flip to me. I assume that there is some reason that I don't know about.

Once again, I like reading your stories, and the clever things you come up with. I really like your calloused world where girls are food.

PinkJazz

Posted by PinkJazz 4 months ago Report

wtf, I have no idea how that name change happened? I must've had a brain fart at some point and just forgotten what his name was XD I'll have to jump in and fix that when I'm able