You'll recognise the Wallatjies section with the canals and the window girls. I read through your story. Some nice descriptive work, but be wary of keeping too much hidden from the reader. It's a common cheap trick I see in a lot of horror tales to make the ending seem more mysterious than it actually is. I keep meaning to pop in on the writing group but my writing is crawling along at a snail's pace at the moment :)
Posted by mjm202036 16 years ago Report
I love your work. Glad to see your stories posted here, where some of them will be more appreciated, I think.
Posted by Angel 16 years ago Report
Oh wow, I love it! I wonder if she will teach me that trick if I ask her nicely? :-)
Too bad she didn't eat the other guy though. Why stop at just one? ^^
Posted by Sehnsucht 15 years ago Report
Heh, I'm going to Amsterdam on my stag do in a bit. How much of this is original research? :)
Great story---I've really enjoyed reading through your archive, and have written something inspired by it in the latest Writing Group: http://aryion.com/forum/viewtopic.php?f=38&t=18517#p473145
Posted by ManyEyedHydra 15 years ago Report
You'll recognise the Wallatjies section with the canals and the window girls. I read through your story. Some nice descriptive work, but be wary of keeping too much hidden from the reader. It's a common cheap trick I see in a lot of horror tales to make the ending seem more mysterious than it actually is. I keep meaning to pop in on the writing group but my writing is crawling along at a snail's pace at the moment :)