Hmm, good structure, nice character, and well defined motivation. All in all, you did a good job with this. The plots not really my thing, but I've got to admit, it made me think of one of my first vore comic finds, a series called Paulis.
Thanks! I was actually working on a different story, but decided to take a break and go with this idea. I know there's a lot leading up to the actual vore, but that's usually the best way I'm able to write.
Ah, my mistake. Yeah, I usually try to think the story through from both pred and prey, so it's easiest for me to include the awareness a lot of the time.
Glad you liked it! I was actually a little stressed out when I first had the idea, so yes it does get a little darker. I like to think that the very end is a little on the lighter side, as there is some conflict resolution despite the main character's fate.
Nice story. Only negatives from me are that it took way too long to get to the "action" and that the "action" went a little too quickly. But other than that the story itself was a good, well written story
Posted by Star_Sage 16 years ago Report
Hmm, good structure, nice character, and well defined motivation. All in all, you did a good job with this. The plots not really my thing, but I've got to admit, it made me think of one of my first vore comic finds, a series called Paulis.
Posted by SpiceWeasel 16 years ago Report
Thanks! I was actually working on a different story, but decided to take a break and go with this idea. I know there's a lot leading up to the actual vore, but that's usually the best way I'm able to write.
Posted by Star_Sage 16 years ago Report
Oh, I didn't mean the plot of story early on, I meant that it was aware vore. Sort of. I'm more into unaware giants.
Posted by SpiceWeasel 16 years ago Report
Ah, my mistake. Yeah, I usually try to think the story through from both pred and prey, so it's easiest for me to include the awareness a lot of the time.
Posted by Stray 16 years ago Report
Another good story from you my friend! The ending was a little darker than usual, but it helped make for an interesting plot. Well done!
Posted by SpiceWeasel 16 years ago Report
Glad you liked it! I was actually a little stressed out when I first had the idea, so yes it does get a little darker. I like to think that the very end is a little on the lighter side, as there is some conflict resolution despite the main character's fate.
Posted by aimy 13 years ago Report
One of the best scenarios i've ever seen. I love this story.
Posted by SpiceWeasel 13 years ago Report
Thanks for the love!
Posted by Corona29 10 years ago Report
Nice story. Only negatives from me are that it took way too long to get to the "action" and that the "action" went a little too quickly. But other than that the story itself was a good, well written story
Posted by SpiceWeasel 9 years ago Report
Thanks for the feedback, I'll keep that in mind.
Posted by Telhem 6 years ago Report
Another marvel of vore litature, even by your standards.
Posted by SpiceWeasel 6 years ago Report
Thank you, that means a lot to me.