I loves me some revenge vore :D. There's only one thing that really stood out to me; every time a new person speaks, you have to start a new paragraph. It makes it much harder to read when all of the quotes are jumbled next to each other. Don't let me discourage you, though. I really did enjoy the content, especially the vore scene at the end.
Posted by Rhewin 15 years ago Report
I loves me some revenge vore :D. There's only one thing that really stood out to me; every time a new person speaks, you have to start a new paragraph. It makes it much harder to read when all of the quotes are jumbled next to each other. Don't let me discourage you, though. I really did enjoy the content, especially the vore scene at the end.
Posted by TerminusOmega 15 years ago Report
Glad you like it. Hope you enjoy the rest of the story. It's not finished yet, there will be more than the four chapters I've posted so far.