Posted by Tsavo 15 years ago Report

I've always enjoyed stories where the pred gets fed his meal. Nicely done as usual. Your paragraphing format makes reading very easy.

Posted by BerserkerB 15 years ago Report

Thanks, though Eka's is altering my style for some reason. There's not supposed to be a space between all my paragraphs, just indents, like in books.

Posted by Gypa 14 years ago Report

This, is one hot story becouse it has my favorite type of furry vore when natural preds becomes preys. Those stories are somthing else that sent my body into pure blis after reading them while I(censored),

Warning possible SPOILERS
but now for my main point I think this story would be even better if you would add ca another 1000 words to it as I feelt little cheated that there were no description exactly how Sefra consumed the Hyon as "we" dont know how much Sefra liked Hyon is taste or if he had done this before to the Hyon although it is clear form the start I think that the Hyon knows that Sefra eat natural-preds regularly, As he likes to feed Damien to Sefra and him self probably as well to based his reaction when Sefra offers to eat him since there is little or no protest from him. iM not sure how Sefra's RL owner see this story but If I were him I would like to see that description added that I takled about. Im not sure if I can formally reqeust or ask nicely for that descreption too be added but I I can formally request descreption too be add I done so hereby a part from the lack descreption of Sefra consuming the Hyon I don't think there is anything else that could improve this story drasticly but I think few line could be changed to improve the plot and I can send you my Ideas of improvement in PM if you want, I think you would like them.

Posted by BerserkerB 14 years ago Report

I haven't been on this site in a while, but I will comment to this. This story was done as a part of a series where I tried to make a story in about - get this - 1000 words!
It's supposed to be short. I'm glad you liked it, and I'm happy that you want more, but the length was intentional. Trust me, if I wanted to I could have dragged the story out with lovely detail.

Posted by Gypa 14 years ago Report

Warning: Posible spoilers for others than original author and me.
hum, I see but I figured out that since you weren't there to replay to me, when I wrote my comment originally, I resolved to write out for myself how Sefra consumed the Hyon, I bet that it was part of the Hyon and Sefra's deal Sefra would eat him also just before Sefra eats him he say "Ah Dam-" I asume he were going to say "Ah Damien I coming", not bad deal that the Hyon did with the hungry bunny and who doesn't want make such deal. I also bet that Sefra has swallowed the Hyon before/but im not relay sure But I did this so it would be easier for me to modify Sefra consuming Damien into Sefra consuming the Hyon. Bare in mind Im not native on English so it was the easiest why for me to write out the second sequence of vore modlify the first sequence to the second. If you would like read what I wrote I can just pm it to you and I would like you to read what I wrote so I can see if we are seeing circumstance how Sefra eats the Hyon and is ther simiilar relation ship between Sefra and the Hyon and Damien and the Sefra, but wathever they were before I bet the are pretty similar now afterwards.

Posted by Gypa 14 years ago Report

Small bugs, second to last line should read "so I can see if we are seeing circumstance in similar light on how Sefra actually swallowed the Hyon and is there relationship similar between Sefra"

Posted by BerserkerB 14 years ago Report

He was going to say "Ah Damnit" :P

Posted by Gypa 14 years ago Report

hum, that actaully makes more sense than I thought he were saying, but I think he is only saying "Ah Damnit" because Sefra had his bluff called, as I highly doubt that the Hyon would star longingly at Sefra's fox filled belly, wanting too rub it an then agree too rub it and hug Sefra without wanting too be bunny snack himself. But since he is hyon he can’t honestly admit that he likes to be on the prey ends of things, as there often strange why to show what you actually like. If he were not interested in what is going on I think he would have left soon as the Bunny has closed his mouth over Fox’s toes. So tell me I know that the Hyon agreed to feed the fox to the buuny and I personally think that the Hyon agreed too be bunny snack himself (you haven’t denied that so far) as I said so did you intent the Hyon to feed himself to the bunny when Sefra open his maw infront of him or did Sefra actually need to do this part of the feeding himself. And the final question is the Hyon regular bunny snack like the fox or is this his first trip to Sefra’s belly? Im only typing this so I can map it out in my head correctly what you intented but didn’t wirite in the second vore scenario in this very hot exelent story.