Posted by Gypa 14 years ago Report

I commented on your first story, I did say that this is much better and well writen you can clearly write an F/M vore. Keep going.

References to horrible disease is off putting. But since it was less important for the main story line (than the govermental references in your first story) I think it is easier to "ignore" it. Allthough it might be harder to ignore in possible sequel.


On the main plot, I think our Peter was little too hateful in his approach to womens. I wonder if he had been exact opposite approach being mr Nice guy would Janet have sent him too Greta. But I think Janet would have found another reason to sent him. But I belive Janet sent waste majority of her students to Greta and waste majority of them end inside Greta is belly. I mean Janet wants end inside Greta herself. Although I don't think Greta needs to growth anymore hight to consume Janet (note: I prefer same-Size vore). But before that happens I would like to see Janet sending Greta a student that is exact opposite to our Peter as I do wonder were that would lead such kind of student, but I still suspect that would be inside Greta is belly.

Finally you should defenetly write sequel to this and more beyond that.

Posted by printz 14 years ago Report

I want to write another story where Greta is larger just because Janet wants to go down a longer distance to the stomach. I can edit that and change a few things. I based Peter on a man I used to work with. He was the most horrible misogynist I ever knew. Yes, Janet is in love with Greta. I think you're right even though I hadn't thought about it. She finds something wrong with a lot of her students: mostly male I'd guess. I think Janet's husband is a prop. Janet can't just face being a lesbian. Peter was a creep but he was destined to be a snack. Janet is probably jealous of Peter and all the others who have gone down Greta's throat. I doubt that Janet is even trying to seek treatment for breast cancer. She might be making it all up. Greta probably knows that. She just wants to swallow Janet in the worst way. I might cut down on the size thing a bit. Fifteen feet is a little hard to manage. I really wasn't good on the weight to height ratio. Might seven and a half work? I was thinking about how things are with an octopus. They use more of what they consume and grow larger. You might have noticed that I just can't stay away from the "if you eat people, they become shit" thing. Greta wanted to get rid of Peter as soon as her intestines would let her. Greta loves the feeling of taking a massive dump when it's a person. Lester was embarrassed by it. It's the first time in my life that I've ever asked the question:How much would it be anyway? You know it’s a wonderful experience to receive your comments. I'm so glad you tell me what you think.

Posted by Gypa 14 years ago Report

Since you based Peter actually person thats explain alot, so in that sence I think you did excellent job on bending Peter's will toward Greta will, but I tend think that based on my comment "mr Nice guy" I would have thought that Peter or any other male student would end up for one reason or another inside Greta's belly, We decently know Peter's reason for being a prick, so I was manly wondering if opposite behavior would have led to the same conclusion.

On the size thing yes I think you should cut that down bit as if Janet is to go next into Greta then I think the size differential is to much, but it's your story so I not going to order you round with this though.

AS for Janet for being a lesbian so that might be what she is actually referring to when she tels Greta that she "has breast cancer". As for her Jealousy all the pepole that Greta has already sallowed I would think if Greta is much older than her like centuries older then I would thought that at one point were she was very young girl Greta just swallowed her mother and her Grandmother before that and so on. But in your last comment I think you confused worst with best as I cant read it anywhere in the story that Greta was going to make Janet is experience miserable..

What do you mean with this question "How much would it be anyway?" As Im not sure how I should reply to that question. I that is related to the scat thing then im rather indifferent.

Posted by printz 14 years ago Report

I'm sorry about the confusing remark about Greta wanting to swallow janet in the worst way. It was just one of those regional things the has an entirely different meaning. What I meant was that Greta desperately wanted to do it.She will do whatever it takes to make it as elaborite and beautiful as she can for Janet. O.K, Janet isn't strictly a Lesbian. She just loves Greta more than anyone else in the world. I think I was trying to find a way not to get into any scat stuff. I was more or less apologising for using it as often as I have. It isn't something I expected an answer to. It was just my trying to figure out how to handle the problem of - oh well - that is something I will just not get into if I can avoid it. I probably did too much anyway. I've decided to make Greta shorter than 15 feet tall. As I said, it was about Janet wanting to slide down a longer throat. That was too much me and not enough Janet. I've been thinking about Peter. I know he was an awful person but it might be that Greta has a way of manipulating her prey. She has a power to make people want to do things they normally wouldn't. It isn't some mind control thing as much as knowing how to influence people through subtle actions and body language. Breast cancer was just a type of cancer I used because it was helpful in determining a motive. It is a horrible desease. I don't think Janet knows for sure that she has it. She knew Peter's sister had it, I'm sure. I'm thinking that Janet wants to be swallowed by Greta before she sees herself as not being attractive enough. She wants to be swallowed as a beautiful woman. I don't need to get into this too much but I doubt very many people in Janet's family live to old age.

Posted by printz 14 years ago Report

OOOOh! I just discovered that the plague years were around 1347. Greta is old and very very very experienced. She was in her teens then so... She's around 690 or so. Just a guess. I bet she stopped counting centuries ago.