Well here goes nothing. Here’s my first full length story at Eka’s Portal! Held within these pages is a story of a fantastic trip out to the woods; unfortunately everything does not go as planned. A girl needs to get online and her date comes to the rescue with a nifty new multi-purpose tool. As the story continues, they try to help with getting the campfire stew started, but run out of logs. Instead of putting new logs on the fire, the two people decide to use the multi-purpose tool to cook the food instantly.
Well, if I was to go any further, there would be no point in reading the story! Read it, and enjoy the unfortunate adventures of Kim and Peter as they end up being mixed within the dinner itself!
Comments and suggestions for improvements are always welcome. I've tried to remove all the type-o's, so if you see one, I'll re-upload this again with it changed.
Thanks, and enjoy!
*Gurgle*
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Posted by Star_Sage 15 years ago Report
Okay, pretty good. I can't find any out there flaws with the story that aren't nitpicks about how, and others about too much focus on the girl at the beginning in a sexist way. Still, those are nitpicks, and usually just style differences rather than outright complaints. Good job.
Posted by team1223 15 years ago Report
Creating characters out of thin air has always been hard for me. I believe that’s why I went into so much detail describing how people looked and what not.
Anyways, I’m glad to hear you liked it! Thanks!
Posted by Liar 15 years ago Report
*nosebleeds*
Posted by team1223 15 years ago Report
Ha, was it reeeeeeeeally that good?
Posted by Liar 15 years ago Report
Yeah! I liked the way as you described the characters at first, everyone unaware of what could happen and then, since they fell inside the soup, that was just awesomely great! Hungry unaware preds are the best!!
Posted by Zombie_Slave 15 years ago Report
How did I miss this story? Good job. Do you prefer male preds?
Posted by team1223 15 years ago Report
Thanks again, and yes - for the most part. LOL!
Posted by Sara377544 6 years ago Report
This is such a great story - man