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The second installation: many a question is being answered here. Please gimme some comments, I wanna know if I'm doing alright or what I should change.
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Posted by icemon 13 years ago Report
Good story so for. Couple of spelling errors here and there, but other than that It’s a good story so far. keep up the good work.
Posted by kidclef 13 years ago Report
Finally! Some one comments on these things! When no one said anything about the first chapter, I thought I did something wrong.
Posted by icemon 13 years ago Report
No there wasn't anything wrong with the first chapter; I actually thought it was pretty good. The only reason I thing no one commented was the fact that all the vore in that chapter was kind of implied, there was no writing of it happening, you can see that with your other story cravings were it is played out and you have 13 comments. Doesn’t matter to me personally, good story’s a good story; vore scene writing is just a bonus.
Posted by kidclef 13 years ago Report
Hmmmm I see. The mob is fickle. Rest assured, a full blown vore scene will be included in the next installment.
Posted by Adseria 8 years ago Report
Nice.
I do have one question about a minor plot point, though; Clefto says "your species would be easy to subjugate" and then goes on to completely disprove that with talk about nukes and our "willingness to disintegrate each other".
Posted by kidclef 8 years ago Report
Maybe I worded that wrong. When he says that they'd be easily conquered, he means that they would be IF they didn't have nukes.