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A rabbit who's just come of age attends a mysterious fall festival with eldritch undertones, that all who come of age feel compelled to attend. At the end, he becomes the chosen 'guest' of the harvest festival's unnamed, patron goddess, and is compelled to take part in a rather... sticky ritual. (This may be removed and reuploaded after criticism/advice from the July Writing Group)
EDIT:
I should warn you that this is kiiinddd of a long story. The vore/UB starts about halfway down.
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Posted by billfenton 12 years ago Report
I like it. I feel, for such a long story, that the characters could be fleshes out a little. Also, some interaction between Glynn and the goddess would be nice. Great story, though!
Posted by Jahan 12 years ago Report
Well, actually, I do not want to really dwell on the nature of the Goddess.. much as how really explaining who Azatoth is can, well, ruin some of it.
I do agree that the characterization could use work.
Posted by miranda_dragon 12 years ago Report
Yikes.
If UB was depicted like this more often I'd probably read more of it.
Posted by Jahan 12 years ago Report
Oh, wow, from you, that is high praise indeed! Thanks. I admit, it's the kind of UB I tend to have an interest in. XD
Posted by Straxacore 12 years ago Report
I loved it. Great great story ^_^ I would love to see more.
Posted by Jahan 12 years ago Report
Thanks! I intend to revist the world/setting at some point-I have the story laid out in my head. I also intend to get a few illustrations for this one at some point. =)
Posted by Straxacore 12 years ago Report
Well I can't wait to see both ^_^
Posted by Icethorn 12 years ago Report
Damn. That was good. MELTY MELTY MELTY :3
Posted by Thanatos2k 12 years ago Report
Hey, this story is great.