Posted by Teruyo 12 years ago Report

Tales of Symphonia vore, eh? You have my attention.

Posted by AtmosRobot 12 years ago Report

Cool story. Not often do you see Tales of Symphonia stuff around here.

Alas, even though this is obviously non-canon, I feel bad for Zelos. :(

Posted by BlueMarvel611 12 years ago Report

Thanks for the comment. It really means a lot given that this was actually something of a stress reliever for me given current circumstances. Anyways I find the non-canon pairing a challenge for me given. Doing Canon's just too easy for me given. Thanks again

Posted by AtmosRobot 12 years ago Report

You're welcome.

Posted by Bright 10 years ago Report

Heh, very nice story.

Posted by DeadStrategicCactus 10 years ago Report

I apologize for the tardiness of your review request. I do hope posting it will actually make up for it.

To start, from a technical standpoint I saw very few grammatical (such as eggbear in the first paragraph, it should be Eggbear) and punctuation errors. However the errors are quite a rarity so you really did a fine job with this, especially for a stress reliever.

Next is the vore itself. The swallowing scene was well done, both in description and length. The "Did this just happen" scene Sheena had afterwards was also a nice addition and fit very well. Furthermore, the post-digestion growth that occurred in the Epilogue is something I personally look forward to reading in every story I read that features vore. And I must personally applaud you for it.

Now since this is a form of fan-fiction with a game I know quite well, I feel only obligated to rate your portrayals of the featured characters. It's been some time since I last played ToS, but I noticed nothing significantly off about Sheena or Zelos as you wrote them. Although Zelos' frequent use of "hunny" to Sheena was strange to me as I can never recall a time he refers to her as such. Furthermore, Sheena's use of "My Martel" also seemed weird as I'm sure on several occasions "My God" or "Oh my God" are spoken while "My Martel" isn't. I feel like I'm nitpicking though and I apologize for that.

The only other thing that comes to mind is when you wrote out Sheena's belch after she swallowed Zelos and then later on said "and then another juicy belch was unleashed" or something along those lines. The consistency, or lack thereof in this case bothers me slightly. However, its really a trivial issue and doesn't really hurt the story in anyway. I can say I'm glad you aren't one of those people who over emphasize a belch when writing it out.

All in all, I can say this was a rather well written story you produced. Especially, as mentioned before, given you did this for some stress relief. I do hope you continue to write stories however as I'm quite fond of several you've written so far.