Anonymous
Login to read messages.
Uploaded: 12 years ago
Views: 3,633
File size: 17.28 KiB
MIME Type: application/vnd.openxmlformats-officedocument.wordprocessingml.document
Comments: 8
Favorites: 24
Tags: F/F Nudity Sex Story Unbirth
Aya Brea and Lightning have a bit of fun, and then things take a darker turn.
Please login to post a comment.
Posted by joeburp22181 12 years ago Report
With no spaces that story was a bit of a chore to read but I like your writing skills, thanks for taking the time to create this.
Posted by ESFantasia 12 years ago Report
Thanks. First time I've ever written Vore, sorry for the lack of spaces though. Just my style. I'll be honest, i wrote it all in one sitting today.
Posted by Groblek 12 years ago Report
It looks like an interesting story, but I can't get past the lack of paragraphs. Formatting the story correctly would greatly improve it, I think.
I'm sorry, but I already understand the fact that the lack of formatting made it a little worse. but if you haven't even read it, can you truly critize it?
Can I criticize the content, no, but I certainly can criticize the presentation when it's bad enough that I get eyestrain trying to read the story.
Read the one I just wrote. Should be better formatted.
Posted by WolfFort 12 years ago Report
It was good. I avoid the eye strain by high lighting the words.
Thank you. the first comment not trashing the lack of spacing. anything else that was good, or something you'd like to see? I need ideas..
Reply to this comment
Posted by joeburp22181 12 years ago Report
With no spaces that story was a bit of a chore to read but I like your writing skills, thanks for taking the time to create this.
Posted by ESFantasia 12 years ago Report
Thanks.
First time I've ever written Vore, sorry for the lack of spaces though. Just my style.
I'll be honest, i wrote it all in one sitting today.
Posted by Groblek 12 years ago Report
It looks like an interesting story, but I can't get past the lack of paragraphs. Formatting the story correctly would greatly improve it, I think.
Posted by ESFantasia 12 years ago Report
I'm sorry, but I already understand the fact that the lack of formatting made it a little worse.
but if you haven't even read it, can you truly critize it?
Posted by Groblek 12 years ago Report
Can I criticize the content, no, but I certainly can criticize the presentation when it's bad enough that I get eyestrain trying to read the story.
Posted by ESFantasia 12 years ago Report
Read the one I just wrote. Should be better formatted.
Posted by WolfFort 12 years ago Report
It was good. I avoid the eye strain by high lighting the words.
Posted by ESFantasia 12 years ago Report
Thank you.
the first comment not trashing the lack of spacing.
anything else that was good, or something you'd like to see? I need ideas..