Posted by letmeinn0w 12 years ago Report

Thanks for the story! Is there any chance of this being continued?

Posted by Lum_the_mad 12 years ago Report

There is indeed a decent chance of this being continued, because Zagoroth is actually one of the villains in my story with Eldor. I'm not sure whether I want to continue through his line of the story first, or perhaps Eldor's. Zagoroth is the more evil side of my story that eventually will clash with Eldor and Elarial. Although he is not the ultimate villain in my story, he is one of the most powerful ones.

But will it be within the next month? That's a little harder to say... inspiration comes and goes with me at the worst of times. Yet Zagoroth is pretty easy to work with since he works very much off of the most base of desires and sins. My dragons oftentimes are the epitome of the 7 deadly sins, Greed, Lust, Gluttony, Sloth, Wrath, Envy, and Pride.

And thank you for the comment! ^_^

Posted by dragondoom 12 years ago Report

love this story

Posted by Lum_the_mad 12 years ago Report

Aww, thank you! :D It means a lot to me to hear positive reviews!

Posted by SleepyIsland48 5 years ago Report

Me: What a great story! I hope it gets a part 2 soon...
“Uploaded: 7 years ago”
Me: Oh no

Posted by Lum_the_mad 5 years ago Report

Oh geez, I almost forgot i was planning a part 2 to this. It does make me a little tempted to come back to this though :3

Posted by therealtrashpie 3 years ago Report

Oof, yeah doesn't seem like there'll be a sequel anytime soon. Heh, another good read. I'll have to get into Eldor now. And if this draggy isn't the most evil villain in your universe than oh boy. Eat your heart out, Thanos.

Posted by Lum_the_mad 3 years ago Report

ASFFGDRTH >/////< It's been SO long since I worked on this world and this story! I'm glad you enjoyed the read, and that it still holds up after 8 years, but I don't know how well the Eldor story holds up. It might actually be better simply because I had less inhibitions back then, but I was also a teenager when I first STARTED writing it? Eldor himself was from an adventure I wrote about in my childhood that I sort of carried over into a sequel saga. Eldor's basically old and retired now in the story I have up, which is why he's just sort of hiding out in a cave in the mountains. Eldor and Elarial were supposed to eventually meet up with Ella and Zagoroth later down the line, during poor Ella's pregnancy.

Posted by therealtrashpie 3 years ago Report

Hehe, I figured I'd hit you with nostalgic just a bit more by commenting on this one (That and I just love dragons, evil or not). But yes, i say the story holds up nicely and certainty opened up a lot of doors and potential for a series. You did effort here to add intresting lore, characters, etc... And you seem to recollect a bit of this world even after all this time. I'm curious if you'd ever consider giving another fair shake with this stuff. Or if you've thought up how it could've all ended.

Posted by Lum_the_mad 3 years ago Report

I do keep it sort of open so that I can come back to it, because there were a LOT of plot twists and spoilers that I didn't want to reveal until they got there in the story.

Basically one of the things that was going to happen in the next chapter of the Eldor series was going to be where Kaylin (Elarial's sister) drags the bard out of bed, and forces him to take her to go see Eldor. She's a disciple of her goddess and received visions of something having gone drastically wrong, and wants to go investigate. There she confronts Eldor who informs her sister that her sister tried to kill him, and that she was "dealt with" while Elarial is still trapped inside his stomach. This leads to another battle, one that Kaylin and the bard will lose, and so Eldor makes Kaylin and offer that she can go 'save' her sister if she's willing to go in to get her.

Once inside the stomach she comes to realize that Elarial had sort of gone into this willingly because of her crimes, and Kaylin kind of beats her up a little because she'd been lied to by Elarial. She also comes to realize that Eldor had tricked her into his stomach because of her misplaced faith in her sister, but he plans on letting out both sisters anyways so that they can go to Shadowdale together.

Eldor is meanwhile berating Aiden the bard for betraying his oath as a lorekeeper... and that's about as far as I had worked out. I know where the story goes, I know how the plot twists go, and I know how the story ends... but getting there and the adventures from her to then aren't completely worked out.

I CAN tell you that with Zagoroth, he finds out that Ella is one of the rare elven princesses who inherited some heritage with the goddess of water and elven vitality. The reason she's drawn to the lake that feeds his underground lair is because of this connection, and because this is where the goddess had blessed the first elven princess so long ago. Whenever she would die, if she's close enough to water from that lake, it will heal and restore her. Because of this connection, he's actually curious to see if she could survive a half-dragon pregnancy with the constant regeneration of the lake's waters.

Ella eventually develops Stockholm syndrome, and actually starts to look forward to having her baby. When Zagoroth's goblins are on one of their raids they tangle with the wrong group of travelers. Elarial finds out that the goblins have the missing elven princess, and decides this is a bounty she wants to collect for personal reasons. The reason? The goblins mention the princess is pregnant from their dragon master, and Eldor had warned her what could potentially happen if the two of them tried that sort of thing.

Zagoroth is not much of a match for Eldor, but is more than a match for his human allies because of his shadow nature. He's also able to use them against him, so the battle between the two of them is VERY intense, and it's actually Ella who manages to turn the tide of the battle by destroying Zagoroth's soul shard. Like a lich, he kept part of his soul separate from his body, so was immortal unless it was destroyed, and it was invulnerable to anyone but her. Zagoroth laughs at the irony that he'd finally trusted someone and that trust was betrayed, and that he wouldn't have it any other way.

Ella goes into labor almost immediately after the death of the baby's father, and the goblins no longer enslaved to Zagoroth's will run for the hills. Kaylin works on delivering the baby, and the first half-shadow dragon is born. He's born as more of an anthro-dragon rather than a shape-shifting dragon due to Zagoroth taking Amber in his dragon form rather than assuming a humanoid one. The baby does not have an easy life ahead of it in the elven kingdom, because the elven community views it as an entity of evil. They want to accept their princess back, but they want her to have nothing more to do with her child. She doesn't want to choose between her child and her home, so Elarial offers to look after him with Eldor. As a dragon Eldor can guide him towards the right path in dragonhood, and she can be its adoptive mother. Ella reluctantly agrees, and will visit her baby when she's allowed to, but names as the aunt for the sake of her child and the communities involved.

That's more or less how the Zagoroth storyline ends.

Posted by therealtrashpie 3 years ago Report

Oh my, you definitely had quite a lot figured out. Very amazing adventure even if it was just a rough summary. And a happy ending too, well, aside that Ella could only see her kid on weekends, hehe. I could totally see the half dragon child struggle with internal confliction as well. His inborn nature to dwell in shadow and evil like his father constantly yanking upon his heart.

I have thought of some stories as well but I don't see myself as a very good auther. But basically I have this Modern day Madusa story in my head. In the myth she's beheaded by the demigod Perseus. However in my story Perseus is defeated by Madusa but manages to escape, later he would be cursed by the gods for his failure. Fearing for her own well-being, Madusa moves in secrecy for hundreds of years. Being outcasted by society as a monster and cursed to turn people to stone, she continues to remain her immortal life in complete isolation for hundreds of years.

It isn't until someone named Percy happens by her lair that her way of life changes. She manages to capture him in her coils (in my version Madusa has a snake body from the waist down) and tries to turn him into a statue. But Percy put 2 and 2 together that she was a gorgon of greek mythology and kept his eyes shut. After hours of faild attempts to open his eyes, Madusa became annoyed and bored. She decided to do something almost as fun as turning people to stone. She eats him.

Though Madusa expected to hear cries and pleas till the end, to her surprise Percy asks how she was still alive after her supposed death. She laughs both at the absurdity of that version of the story and the fact her food wanted to make conversation. Never the less she recalls the entirety of her tragic origin and Purcy sympathizes despite his current predicament and tells Madusa that her world had become ancient myth, and that no gods have shown themselves to exist. Madusa grows with curiosity on how so much of the world had changed and wanted to learn more. And so she takes murcy on Purcy (hehe) and make him her pet, promising to spit him out after she was done enjoying him.

Pretty basic and simple story really. I was also thinking of doing more where they bond and trust in each other. Percy taking her out of her lair to show her around his home. She would wear apparel to hide her features from public eye.