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Naruto vore story.
Hinata/Naruto.
This one's quite different from my other stories with this pairing. No accidental eatings in this one.
It's rather shot, but it is very hard to write long one-shots. Short is good. Easier with long chapter when there is an ongoing story.
(EDIT: Fleshed out the story and reposted it.)
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Posted by Bright 11 years ago Report
I think it was a rather enjoyable short story.
Posted by Vir 11 years ago Report
Thanks.
Posted by joeburp22181 11 years ago Report
That Hinata is one hungry chick. lol :)
Posted by Vir 11 years ago Report
Indeed, she is.
Posted by Readasaur 11 years ago Report
What exactly did he say to upset her so much, again? I was unclear on which thing that he said that pushed her over the edge.
Posted by Vir 11 years ago Report
Just fleshed the story out and reposted it. It should make a bit more sense now.
Posted by Vir 11 years ago Report
Thanks.
Posted by joeburp22181 11 years ago Report
Curious also Vir, do you have a bio on Hinata somewhere? I am unfamiliar with your lore and was unsure what a Hyuga is. Is she non human and if so what kind of alien or what type of world do your stories take place in? Also do you have any pictures of Hinata or Naruto anywhere? Sorry for my novice understanding but I just grew curious over this and was wondering if you could take the time to dictate every aspect of your world to me. Thanks in advance... Joe
Posted by Flame14 11 years ago Report
Website with all relevant knowledge is here: http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Narutopedia
A link to Hinata’s bio: http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Hinata_Hyūga
Note: you will want the part two info for any chance of a picture.
Link to Hyuga bio: http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Hy%C5%ABga_clan
Note: Hyuga is a name for a clan or family with a unique trait
Link to Naruto’s bio: http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Naruto_Uzumaki
Note: again you will want to look at the part two info
Hope this helps.
Posted by Vir 11 years ago Report
It'd get really tedious if one would have to do a write down the whole background of the franchise in every story. Since it is fanfiction, you could simply look into the Naruto franchise.
Nowadays any franchise that is big enough got a wiki of its own. Just google Naruto wiki for example and you'll find Narutopedia. You can get all the pictures and answers there.
Posted by joeburp22181 11 years ago Report
Thanks for the info all, I learned quiet a bit. Appreciate it.
Posted by Vir 11 years ago Report
You're welcome.
Posted by Flame14 11 years ago Report
Short or not it was an enjoyable story. Always love your Hinata vore stories. I have to say that it is about time that she started to be a bit more aggressive/assertive. The fact that she willingly ate him was rather intriguing and I found the whole drink from the river bit to be a nice touch.
The only thing that I have to say confused me was a sentence near the end, “The buxom girl sat there for the next hour as she continued to digest the boy she used to love.” I personally found it odd that you wrote it as if she had simply stopped loving him all of a sudden. I could understand if you had said something about her pleased yet a bit guilty or if you made reference to her still feeling a sense of love and longing towards Naruto, one that was overshadowed by her first experience with the emotion anger. All I’m saying is that it confused me at how quickly you had her feelings change from love to seemingly spiteful indifference.
One other thing was that we didn’t get to see things from Naruto’s view and how Hinata’s sudden intention to eat and digest him impacted him emotionally and mentally. I only point this out because you normally do this for the prey. Loved the whole “Now be good and digest…” part that you had her say; found it quite hot for some reason.
On a side note, this story has reminded me of an idea I had a few years ago when I was talking to a friend and he made an off-handed comment about Mizuki and his hate for the fox, coupled with genjustu. I just thought I’d bring this up and if you felt interested I’d send a PM of idea.
Posted by Vir 11 years ago Report
Thank you. Just to note, I just fleshed the story out a bit and reposted it.
Posted by Flame14 11 years ago Report
So I see. Spotted a few changes in wording as well as adding a part for Naruto’s view. I love reading about how Hinata enjoyed her meal so much as well as all the references made to her bouncing and sloshing belly. I do hope you have another story with Hinata in the making as your stories are always a treat to read.
Again if you ever need someone to bounce ideas off of or are just looking for some random idea in hopes of sparking your interest, just ask. As said I have an idea that might make for a good story but, I have little to no talent as a writer.
Posted by Vir 11 years ago Report
Well, I might have one more in the making at the moment.
As for ideas, do roll them by. No guarantee they'll end up on paper though.
Posted by Flame14 11 years ago Report
PM sent.
Posted by The K 11 years ago Report
Another grand Hinata story.
Posted by Vir 11 years ago Report
Thanks.
Posted by joeburp22181 11 years ago Report
To date how many people _ creatures has hinata eaten?
Posted by Vir 11 years ago Report
That would be a bit of a spoiler. Give the past stories of mine a read, you might enjoy them. :)
Posted by joeburp22181 11 years ago Report
I've read them all and enjoyed them. Was being lazy. :-P
Posted by UserMan90 5 years ago Report
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